Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

As native american of 26 years old, I have visited number of cities around states with different cultural, tradition. Talking about the ' curfew ' looking at recent change in criminal activity including mobs, trafficking & violence sometimes imposing certain restriction can greatly reduce the risk to teenager of certain incidents. This topic will further be elobarated of things which government should focus to catch the predators but until that residents should understand the motive behind such actions of curfew for their teens safety.

I am fully against the practise of curfew as it will not sent a positive message to the parents about the involvement of state and federal protection police to catch the wrong ones. Further, this will reduce the such cruel activites but the fear can stay a long time in local people. Every citizen of the country has fundamental right of their safety at all times to pursue all activities. I believe laws of such crimes should be reconsidered and harsher judgements needs to be given to such criminal.

Children's are unaware until certain age of how to interpret the strangers behaviour and intention when they communicate. Its parent responsibility after the police to ensure the safety of their kids in such grey light area's of curfew. I am confident about the government measures to such incidents as recently such cases were significantly came down in numbers due to survillence and patrolling activites in night of our civil seargents in police department.

The practise of curfew is must in some area's at night for safe passage of youths. As an adults in whole we have to help and overview kids as neighbour and fellow citizen to ensure the societal and communal protection to feel teen's more comfortable around until them when seen in diffculty or confused around.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a recognisable opinion, but it is not consistent: you say, “I am fully against the practise of curfew,” then conclude that it “is must in some area's.” This contradiction makes your position difficult to identify. The response touches on safety, parental responsibility, policing and citizens’ rights, but these points are mostly asserted rather than explained. For example, you mention that curfews may reduce risk and that surveillance has reduced cases, yet you do not provide a clear example or explain how this evidence supports your final view. To strengthen the response, state one position clearly and develop two relevant reasons with specific explanations or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to move from the issue to your opinion, parental responsibility and a concluding view. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the ideas do not build consistently: the second paragraph opposes curfews, while the final paragraph supports them. Connections within paragraphs are also unclear, as in “This topic will further be elobarated of things which government should focus,” which does not clearly signal the next point. Linking words such as “Further” and “As” are used, but they do not always show the relationship between ideas. Plan a clear sequence—position, reason one, reason two, conclusion—and use references and transitions that make each connection explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “criminal activity,” “fundamental right,” “surveillance,” “patrolling” and “societal and communal protection.” This gives the response some relevant range, but control is uneven and several choices or spellings make meaning less clear. Examples include “grey light area's,” “wrong ones,” “elobarated” and “diffculty”; “cruel activities” also does not express the intended idea naturally. Some phrases, such as “safe passage of youths,” are vague in this context. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For instance, use “areas with higher crime rates” rather than “grey light areas,” and “offenders” rather than “wrong ones.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “as” and “until,” but complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “it will not sent a positive message,” “laws … needs to be given,” and “Children's are unaware,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement and plurals. Articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “As native american of 26 years old” and “Its parent responsibility.” Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after modal verbs, possessives and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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