Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Since 1990, USA has introduced curfew for children in a bid to reduce crime. I personally believe this can lead to more serious issues.

The main problem is, it draws children attention towards criminal justice system unnecessarily. Simply being caught on road at night is enough to question young people to police questioning, court visits, fines and criminal records. This process will make children less likely to trust police in future. If the authorities are serious keeping youngsters away from crime constructive engagement is preferable.

Curfew also discriminate against the low income people of the society. Parents may have to work two jobs- one in a day and other at night in order to pay bills, as a result they are not able to supervise their children after dark. This means that curfew inproportionately targets family on a low income, rather than crime itself, and simply adds to a feeling of alienation and persecution for these people.

However, I believe that curfew is tremendously blunt, and short-sighted to the problem of youth crime, and there are better ways to deal with it, such as education, initiatives aimed at keeping youth out of trouble, and investment in community facilities. ofcourse, these are more expensive than curfews but it is more likely to have a real and impact.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the opening: you oppose curfews because they may create harmful consequences. You support this with two relevant points—unnecessary contact with the justice system and disproportionate effects on low-income families—and suggest alternatives such as education and community facilities. These points show a sound response to the question. However, some ideas are less fully developed than others: for example, the claim that contact with police reduces future trust would benefit from a specific example or explanation of how this happens. The final paragraph also introduces alternatives but does not explain how they would reduce youth crime. The response is 34 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop and support your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall progression: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present distinct disadvantages, and the final paragraph proposes alternatives. Paragraphing is appropriate, and linking phrases such as “This means that” and “However” help readers follow the argument. To make the progression more fully developed, connect the proposed solutions more explicitly to the problems raised earlier, rather than listing them briefly at the end. Some sentence links are also slightly awkward: “The main problem is, it draws…” interrupts the flow, while the final paragraph’s “of course” sentence needs clearer punctuation and a more complete connection to the preceding point. Overall, the organisation is logical, with some room to make cohesion smoother and less dependent on basic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of topic vocabulary, including “criminal justice system,” “supervise,” “alienation,” “persecution,” and “community facilities.” These choices help express your argument and show some flexibility beyond basic language. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural choices that reduce precision: “draws children attention” needs a possessive form, “question young people to police questioning” is repetitive and awkward, and “inproportionately targets family” contains spelling and number-form problems. “A real and impact” is also unclear. Aim to use collocations that sound natural and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise phrasing would strengthen the argument without requiring more complicated vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the conditional explanation beginning “Parents may have to work two jobs…,” and most of the argument remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, but they rarely prevent the reader from following your meaning. For example, “Since 1990, USA has introduced” needs an article before “USA,” and “it draws children attention” needs a possessive determiner. In “If the authorities are serious keeping youngsters away,” the structure requires “serious about keeping.” The sentence beginning “Curfew also discriminate” also has a subject–verb agreement error. Review articles, agreement, and sentence punctuation, especially in the final paragraph, where a sentence begins with a lowercase “of course” after a full stop.

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