Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Well, undoubtedly in the democratic world, protests and curfew have been imposed due to nations safety as well as maintain low and order especially in western nations like US. However, teenangers are strickly not allowed in this scenarios and if they want someone be with them for particular time at night. In my opinion,I, somewhat agree with this pehenomenon, and here are my reasons in the following paragraphs.

Firstly, curfews and protests are the part of nations and voice of common people and being a citizen of any country its the right to know and part in these protests wheather of of sany age, in other words, whenever there is any unlawfull acts are happends its create insecurities are the government and ofcouse for people who are depended on pay check to pay check and wants to protect their families and survival. Therefore, being in these protest teenangers come to know what i going on in the nations and englighten their knowledge,which helps them to presue their further studies for attaning a good post in the society. Farmer Protest in India and in France are the classic expamle of the notion, where from teenagers to old man everyone stood againt the laws. Secondly, teengers are the future of nations, if they are not interseted in their nations policies then who's. if they do so then nations safety goes to someone else hands and they run accordingly. Take example of South Asian and middle east countires where the nither youngsters and teenageres are not even intersted and nor their parients allowed them in curfews and the whole nations young adults are planning in their very young age to setteld other conntires,And contries development are almost stopped.

On the other hand, its cretes opposite impression towards own nation. country is always the pride of the population, its diversity, culture, traditions, and history. If teenagers are allo

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response gives a partial opinion—“I, somewhat agree”—and offers reasons about teenagers’ involvement in protests and national affairs. However, the prompt concerns a nighttime restriction on teenagers being outdoors unless accompanied by an adult; much of the essay instead discusses protests, public safety, and young people’s political participation. This makes the response largely tangential, and the reader cannot tell clearly whether you support or oppose the specific curfew described. The examples of protests in India and France do not explain how the proposed curfew affects teenagers or safety. To improve, state your view directly on the curfew and develop relevant reasons, such as protection from nighttime risks balanced against teenagers’ independence, with an example for each.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

You attempt to organise the response with “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “On the other hand,” and these markers show an effort to separate points. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the opening introduces protests and public order, while the body shifts between protest rights, education, national policy, and migration. The contrast signalled by “On the other hand” is not fully developed, and the final sentence is cut off, leaving the argument incomplete. Several sentences are very long and combine multiple claims, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Build a simple structure around your position on curfews, use one focused paragraph per reason, and ensure each paragraph ends with a clear link to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

There is some topic-related vocabulary, including “curfews,” “insecurity,” “policies,” “diversity,” and “development,” and you try to use more formal expressions such as “classic example.” However, inaccurate spelling and word choice are frequent enough to make parts of the message difficult to understand, as in “pehenomenon,” “englighten,” and “presue.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “maintain low and order” and “run accordingly.” The vocabulary range is therefore limited in control, even though you attempt to express abstract ideas. Focus on accurate, natural collocations and check spelling; use precise language connected to the actual issue of nighttime curfews rather than relying on broad terms about nations and protests.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if they do so then nations safety goes to someone else hands.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries make the argument hard to follow. For example, “whenever there is any unlawfull acts are happends” combines incompatible structures, while “its the right to know and part” lacks a parallel grammatical form. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, particularly in the long body sentences. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then join related ideas with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement and possessives before adding further complexity.

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