Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say what the participants liked about the hotel
• explain why they were unhappy about the food
• suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Task-1

Dear Manager,

I hope you are doing good. I am writing this letter regards to organised a party in your hotel. Moreover, my team members are very happy in visiting your hotel.

To begin with, my participants liked your hotel beauty because it is located of heart of my city as well as there is no noise. So what's why they liked the hotel.

Moving towards the rest of information I am worried about food because a couple of days ago, I ordered some food from your hotel. Likewise, when I recieved my order it was very cold and taste is not good.

Furthermore, i request to the manager to improve the food in future owing to then more and more customer will become in your hotel there is no doubt MMC hotel is more beautiful in my whole city but you need to improve the quality of food. I hope you will hear me soon.

yours faithfully,

Navi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: mentioning the positive aspects of the hotel, explaining the issue with the lunch, and suggesting improvements. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of why the food was unsatisfactory is brief and lacks detail. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are expanded with more specific descriptions or context. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though some phrasing is slightly informal or awkward, such as 'I hope you are doing good'. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the depth of information could be improved.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Moving towards', and 'Furthermore' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or unnatural, such as 'Moving towards the rest of information'. Additionally, the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the progression of ideas feel slightly disjointed. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences connect more smoothly to one another.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant words like 'participants', 'organised', and 'quality'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'hotel beauty' instead of 'the beauty of the hotel' and 'no noise' instead of 'a quiet atmosphere'. There are also some minor spelling and grammatical slips, such as 'recieved'. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise collocations and expanding your range of vocabulary to express your ideas with greater accuracy and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I am writing this letter regards to organised a party' (should be 'regarding organizing'), 'So what's why' (should be 'That is why'), and 'more and more customer will become' (should be 'more customers will come'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not fully impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and consistent verb tense control.

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