Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say what the participants liked about the hotel
• explain why they were unhappy about the food
• suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you a concerning feedback from my co-workers about lunch during organization meeting.

But firstly, I would like to thank you for providing us an excellent service during our meeting. Also, all members were appreciate the parking space, you have at hotel. Moreover, Tea and coffee were really good as it was in the meeting room before we enter. Receptionist was so kind, she direct all members with hotel floor maps which were really helpful to us.

However, panel members were not really happy with food especially during lunch. it was cool and not even fully cooked. Also, a vegan lady served with cottage cheese and honey lemon dressing on her salad. her feedback really disappoint me.

I would love to have you in the room especially when food is serve, so you can make sure, it is right order or not.

Kind regards,

Kabir Singh

Manager at XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: you mentioned the positive aspects of the hotel, explained the issues with the lunch, and provided a suggestion for improvement. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation regarding the vegan meal is a bit brief and could have been more clearly connected to the overall dissatisfaction. To improve, ensure that your ideas are fully extended; for instance, you could have elaborated on how the poor food quality impacted the professional atmosphere of the meeting. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though some phrasing is slightly informal.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'Also' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. Additionally, there are some issues with referencing and sentence-level flow; for example, the transition between the positive feedback and the negative feedback could be smoother. The paragraphing is sufficient, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to create a more natural progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'co-workers', 'organization meeting', and 'feedback'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'inform you a concerning feedback' (should be 'inform you of some concerning feedback') and 'all members were appreciate' (should be 'all members appreciated'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding basic grammatical errors that affect word choice. The range is sufficient for the task but lacks the flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('at hotel'), incorrect verb forms ('she direct all members'), and issues with subject-verb agreement ('Tea and coffee were really good'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, although they do not prevent the overall meaning from being understood. To improve, pay closer attention to basic sentence construction, particularly the use of articles, prepositions, and consistent verb tenses. Increasing your control over these fundamental structures will significantly improve your score.

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