Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say what the participants liked about the hotel
• explain why they were unhappy about the food
• suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,'

I hope this email finds you well. I am writing regarding the recent event which was reserved at hotel. The event name was '"All Day Meeting". Everything was well organized. However, our face number of issues while attending this ceremony.

Commencing with the details, the environment was really fantastic and our employees felt glad after this event. The main thing that we like is the decoration the style of hotel decoration same as the western one.

However, there were certain issue that our employee's complaint about them. The most prominent is the hygienic. During serving the food the server did not wear the gloves which destroy the hygienic. Also, some of non-vegetarian staff member had a problem with food. The food was raw and it does not prepare well.

I would be grateful if you take strict action as soon as possible. So, that your staff will not repeat this mistake in future.

Thank you for your time.

Best regards

Amrit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt: you mentioned the positive aspects of the hotel, explained the issues with the food, and suggested improvements. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation regarding the food being 'raw' and the staff not wearing gloves is clear, but the suggestion for improvement is quite brief and lacks detail. To achieve a higher band, you should expand on your suggestions—perhaps by recommending a change in catering staff or a review of food safety protocols—to provide a more comprehensive and professional response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Commencing with', which are appropriate for a formal letter. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes hindered by grammatical errors, such as 'our face number of issues' and 'the most prominent is the hygienic'. Improving the transition between your ideas and ensuring that referencing is accurate will help your writing feel more natural and cohesive. The structure is functional but could be more sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of incorrect word choice and word form errors. For example, you use 'hygienic' as a noun instead of 'hygiene', and 'ceremony' is likely not the best fit for a business meeting. Additionally, 'non-vegetarian staff member' is slightly confusing in this context. To improve, focus on using words in their correct grammatical form and selecting more precise terminology for a professional setting. Expanding your range of collocations will also help you express your complaints more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'our face number of issues' (should be 'we faced a number of issues'), 'the decoration the style of hotel decoration same as the western one' (which is fragmented), and 'it does not prepare well' (should be 'it was not prepared well'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. You need to focus on subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and sentence construction to ensure your meaning is conveyed accurately and professionally.

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