Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say what the participants liked about the hotel
• explain why they were unhappy about the food
• suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well.

I am writing this email about the feedback on the meeting that took place in a local hotel.

Firstly, I would like to discuss the things that participants like in our party. they happy with the equipments that we used in our party well orgainzed structure which they found very unique in the meeting. Moreover, they liked that the furniture was very comfortable for their long sitting periods.

However, they liked everything except the food. They did not like the food quality. They said that there were a few items to eat. there were not properly organized areas for eating foord there were no chairs inside where they ate.

Furthermore, I want to share some suggestions for improving the quality of food in the future. Firstly, the manager should organise everything properly prior the meeting also check everything is well organized or not that would we helpful to make the meeting better in future.

Thank you for giving you time.

Kindly,

Jones

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three bullet points required in the task instructions. You successfully mentioned what participants liked about the hotel, such as the equipment and comfortable furniture, explained why they were unhappy with the food quality and lack of proper dining arrangements, and offered a practical suggestion for improvement regarding advance organization. However, the tone and vocabulary are somewhat repetitive, and the ideas could be developed with slightly more elaboration to reach a higher band. Nevertheless, the requirements of the prompt are fully met in a clear, straightforward manner. You have achieved a solid Band 6.0 for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter follows a clear overall arrangement with an appropriate opening and closing, and uses basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'However' to connect ideas. However, the paragraphing is very weak, with multiple distinct ideas crammed into a single block of text rather than being divided into logical paragraphs for each prompt requirement. Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the sudden shift from talking about the company meeting to 'our party'. Cohesive devices are occasionally mechanical or misused. This places the response firmly at Band 5.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your main points clearly, but the range is quite limited. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'equipments' (equipment is uncountable), 'long sitting periods', and 'foord' (spelling error). You attempt some less common items like 'orgainzed structure' and 'prior the meeting', but these contain spelling mistakes and grammatical slip-ups. Because the errors are noticeable and restrict precision, the vocabulary aligns with a Band 5.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response shows a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence forms, such as 'I am writing this email about the feedback on the meeting that took place in a local hotel.' However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing punctuation, run-on sentences ('there were not properly organized areas for eating foord there were no chairs inside'), and preposition errors ('giving you time' instead of 'your time'). Control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent, which frequently causes difficulty for the reader and places this performance at Band 5.0.

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