Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say what the participants liked about the hotel
• explain why they were unhappy about the food
• suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

To

the manager,

Sir, hope you are doing great, i recently organised an all-day meeting for the comapny at your hotel and the participitant liked the view from the hotel that was breattaking view of mountans filld with white snow looking like a fairytail, their was few problems that one of the few people were unhappy due to the mis management of your staff and rooms services, the food was not as fresh as they though other then that few thing were belived to be expired and as a manager of this hotel its your job to ook for these mistakes and do not repeat them in future,

you can improve these services by having check andl balance on the staff specially the kitchen members and provide fresh products for the customers.

Regards

Miss mehr rehman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points from the prompt. You mentioned what the participants liked about the hotel, explained why they were unhappy about the food regarding freshness and expiration concerns, and suggested that the manager check and balance the staff and kitchen members. However, the tone used in sentences like 'its your job to look for these mistakes' is overly confrontational for a formal complaint letter. Furthermore, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 136 words. Because of the under-length penalty and the slightly inappropriate tone affecting purpose and format, this is awarded a band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing, as almost the entire body is written as a single very long run-on sentence. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic, relying heavily on commas rather than full stops and connecting words. There is a lack of clear logical progression between ideas, and the letter structure deviates from standard formal conventions, beginning with 'To the manager, Sir' rather than a standard salutation and structured opening. Although the main points are present, the weak mechanical structure and lack of paragraphing restrict the score to a band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You demonstrate a basic, minimally adequate vocabulary for the task, using words like 'organised', 'meeting', 'view', and 'staff'. However, there are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'comapny' instead of company, 'participitant' instead of participants, 'breattaking' instead of breathtaking, 'mountans' instead of mountains, 'filld' instead of filled, 'fairytail' instead of fairytale, and 'ook' instead of look. Word choice is sometimes unnatural, such as 'check and balance on the staff'. These frequent lexical and spelling errors place this criterion at a band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The text consists largely of a single massive run-on sentence joined together by commas where full stops or conjunctions should be used. There is a severe lack of control over basic punctuation and sentence boundaries. Although you attempt some complex ideas, the lack of punctuation leads to frequent grammatical faults that place a strain on the reader. There is a very limited range of accurate structures. Consequently, this falls into the band 4.0 category for grammatical range and accuracy.

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