Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say what the participants liked about the hotel
• explain why they were unhappy about the food
• suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir'

i am writing to share feedback regarding an all-day meeting orgenized by our company at your hotel. While our all experience was good, but I would like to bring our both compliments and concerns to your attention based on feedback from our participants.

On a positive tour, our team was very impressed with general invironment. the conference room was big and cofertable. Moreever your staff was soo punctual and kind, they help us to ran our conference smoothly.

However, the lunch provided during the break was the point of dissatisfaction. Several participants complaint that the main dishes were served cold. Furthermore, there are very few choices of dishes.

Kindely improve your food service for our future events.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response only partially addresses the task requirements and falls short of the minimum length requirement, containing 119 words instead of the required 150. While the letter attempts all parts of the prompt by mentioning what participants liked about the hotel, explaining the dissatisfaction with the food, and suggesting improvements, the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For example, the explanation regarding the food is restricted to brief statements that the dishes were served cold and there were few choices, lacking necessary elaboration. Furthermore, the tone and format show weaknesses, and the limited word count heavily restricts the development of the points.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organisation in the letter, but overall progression lacks clarity. The response is divided into brief paragraphs, yet referencing and logical flow between sentences are occasionally disrupted. Cohesive devices are used in a limited and somewhat repetitive manner, such as 'While', 'On a positive tour' (misused), and 'However'. Paragraphing is attempted to separate the positive aspects from the complaints, but the structure remains basic and lacks the clear logical progression expected at higher bands. The opening salutation and transition into the body paragraphs also reflect mechanical organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors in spelling, word choice, and collocation that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Instances of inadequate lexical control include spelling mistakes like 'orgenized' instead of organised, 'invironment' instead of environment, 'cofertable' instead of comfortable, and 'Kindely' instead of kindly. Inappropriate word choices also appear, such as writing 'all experience' instead of 'overall experience' and 'On a positive tour' instead of 'On a positive note', demonstrating restricted control over less common lexical items.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences alongside faulty attempts at complex ones. Frequent errors are present throughout the text, including punctuation and capitalization mistakes like 'Dear sir' and 'i', as well as errors in agreement and tense consistency, such as 'our both compliments', 'participants complaint', and 'there are very few choices' (when referring to a past event). Additionally, clauses are sometimes incorrectly linked, as seen in 'While our all experience was good, but I would like...', which creates structural confusion.

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