Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say what the participants liked about the hotel
• explain why they were unhappy about the food
• suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to let you know about the good and bad things of your services that you and your staff members are provided in our last meeting organised in your hotel.

Firstly, i would like to inform that all the participants like the ambiance of your place and the sound sytem wew also well organised.

Shifting towards the arrangement of food, i and my team was extremely disappointed because of the quality and careless staff. The food was served cold and too spicy.

Lastly, i would suggest that please train your staff how to serve food and give instructions to you chefs to follow the instructions given by the clients. rest is ver good.

I hope you will surely keep these things in your concers and take necessary steps to overcome the flaws. i hope next time i and my co-workers will never be disappointed.

Your sincerely,

Vandana

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three points: it says participants liked the hotel’s “ambiance” and sound system, explains that lunch was “cold and too spicy,” and recommends staff training and clearer instructions for the chefs. These details make the purpose clear and relevant. However, some parts are less fully developed than others. The positive feedback is brief, and the proposed improvements are not very specific: for example, you could explain how the hotel might check food temperature, offer milder options, or gather dietary preferences in advance. The complaint about “careless staff” would also be stronger if supported with a concrete example. A more complete explanation and practical suggestions would make the letter more effective.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: an opening purpose, positive comments, a complaint about lunch, and recommendations followed by a closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and transitions such as “Firstly,” “Shifting towards,” and “Lastly” guide the reader. This gives the response a coherent structure. To make the progression more natural and polished, use transitions that fit a formal letter and avoid relying on a list-like sequence. The final paragraph combines recommendations, praise (“rest is very good”), and hopes for the future, so separating or ordering these ideas more clearly would help. Some references, such as “these things,” are also broad; naming the food and service concerns would make the links between ideas clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “participants,” “quality,” “disappointed,” and “necessary steps.” There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “ambiance” and “sound system.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, which limits precision: “good and bad things of your services,” “careless staff,” and “keep these things in your concerns” do not sound natural in this context. Spelling errors such as “sytem,” “wew,” “ver,” and “concers” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Aim for conventional, precise phrases for hotel feedback and check spelling carefully, especially in the closing and recommendations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response uses mostly simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “because” and “that.” Meaning is generally understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the letter. For example, “services that you and your staff members are provided” has an incorrect structure, while “i and my team was” has a subject–verb agreement error. “I would like to inform that” also needs a different grammatical pattern, such as “inform you that.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase “i” and the run-on sequence “rest is ver good.” Practise accurate sentence patterns first, then add a wider mix of complex structures.

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