Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

"Health is wealth", a famous phrase we all have heard from our childhood. Many people, especially those who are working class barely do exercise during their working days and when they are free. This brought adverse effects in their health in form of lifestyle diesases like obesity, diabetes, blood pressure and so on. Most of them are not doing exercise due to their laziness, while the other groups are so busy that they are not able bring work-life balance. This can only be resolved with a determination and that needs to nurtured individually.

Exercise plays a significant role in the life of a healthy person, and I believe that it must be made a necessicity from childhood. Generally, people have a misconception that having a balanced diet is enough for a person to be fit and healthy. Unfortunately, this is not true at all as studies have already proven that diting can't save you from all diseases. It can help only help people to mitigate their weight that too with only with regular exercise. So, if you think that diting on your working days and playing once a month can you help you stay healthy, you are in some kind of a delusional world. Therefore, we should make sure that we are doing regular workouts, even if that is by going gym or doing it at our home, is the only key to lead a healthy lifestyle. Also, never forget to eat well, which means eat nutrient-rich foods, not junk foods.

An average human being is almost living a sedentary lifestyle by saying, "Oh, I am tired after work, so I can't do any exercise". Being immobile is best way to end up having sever health consequences for the entire life. If we move less, so do we live.

In conclusion, it can be reiterated that we people are missing their exercises because they are either lazy or when they fail bring balance between work and personal life. So, the only solution this is by pushing ourselves to keep doing exercise daily. We can only be healthy by making it a routine and by eating healthy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify two relevant reasons—lack of motivation and difficulty balancing work with personal life—and offer a general solution of making exercise a routine. However, the response only partially answers the task because the causes and remedies are not developed in a balanced, specific way. The second body paragraph focuses largely on diet and the importance of exercise rather than explaining practical measures to help busy workers exercise. The paragraph about tiredness after work adds another cause, but it gives no concrete example or response to that barrier. To strengthen the answer, explain how employers, workplaces, or local authorities could make activity easier, and show how those measures address the causes you identify. Your overall position is present, but the ideas remain broad and under-supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, and the reader can follow its general focus on causes and health. However, progression is uneven: the second paragraph shifts from the reasons workers lack exercise to diet and general health advice, while the short third paragraph introduces tiredness without developing it or linking it to a solution. Connectors such as “Therefore,” “Also,” and “In conclusion” help signal movement, but some transitions feel mechanical, and the conclusion repeats the introduction’s points rather than drawing the discussion together. Paragraphing would be more effective if each body paragraph had one clear purpose—for example, causes in one and practical solutions in another—with ideas linked through clear references and explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “work-life balance,” “sedentary lifestyle,” “nutrient-rich foods,” and “lifestyle diseases,” which helps communicate the topic. There is also some attempt at more formal phrasing, such as “mitigate their weight” and “adverse effects.” However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “healthy,” “exercise,” and “people,” and several inaccurate or misspelled forms are noticeable: “diesases,” “necessicity,” “diting,” and “sever.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “doing exercise” and “pushing ourselves to keep doing exercise daily.” These errors do not prevent the main message from being understood, but they reduce precision. Build a wider set of natural collocations for physical activity and workplace health, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including a conditional structure (“if you think that…”) and clauses introduced by “while” and “because.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include “they are not able bring work-life balance,” “that needs to nurtured individually,” and “the only solution this is by pushing ourselves,” where required grammatical elements are missing. There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction in “we people are missing their exercises” and “If we move less, so do we live.” Aim first for accurate basic patterns: use “are not able to,” “needs to be nurtured,” and “the only solution is to…”. Then add longer clauses only when you can control their structure and punctuation.

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