Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Exercise is important for everyone in their life to improve and maintain their health. In yester years, mostly people do physical work that time they do not need to do extra exercise whereas nowsday, mostly sitting works we can see and that time we need to do exercise to maintain our health. I shall discuss solution of this problem in upcomping paragraphs.

Nowsdays, many wroking people do not do enough exercise in their daily life. This can cause different health problems. There are several reasons why people do not exercise regularly. Firstly, most people have busy work schedules. They spend around nine hours in the office and feel tired after coming home. Secondly, many people spend their free time watching television or using mobile phone instead of doing physical activities. Because of this, they do not get enough exercise.

There are some ways to dolve this problem. Firstly, people should make a daily exercise routine. They can walk for 30 mintues in the morning or evening. Secondly, comapnies should provide some time for physical activities during working hours. They can also arrange sports activities for their employees. For example, in my company many employees sit in front of computers for the whole day. They often feel tired after work. If they walk for some time every days, they can improve their health and feel more active.

In conculsion, we can said that, busy schedules and the use of moblies phones are the main reasons for this problem, people and companies should take steps to make exercise a part of daily life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both questions: it identifies long work schedules and screen-based leisure as reasons for insufficient exercise, then suggests personal routines and workplace activities. The examples of walking for 30 minutes and arranging sports at work are relevant, and the company example helps connect the solution to a real setting. However, some ideas are only briefly explained. For instance, the essay says workers feel tired after work but does not explore how this prevents exercise or how workplace activity could overcome that barrier. The opening also promises to discuss solutions, while the conclusion repeats the causes and recommendations without adding a clear, developed final insight. Explain the effects and practicality of each proposal more fully to strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. The sequence is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help readers identify the main stages. However, these links are somewhat mechanical, and some connections between ideas are not fully clear. The opening moves from past physical work to modern sedentary work, then announces a discussion of solutions, without clearly previewing both parts of the essay. In the conclusion, the causes and solutions are joined in one long sentence, making the relationship between them less clear. Use a wider range of linking methods and make each paragraph’s central point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main ideas, with relevant terms such as “busy work schedules,” “physical activities,” and “employees.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce accuracy, including “nowsday,” “wroking,” “dol ve,” and “moblies phones.” Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “sitting works” and “make a daily exercise routine.” These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the overall message, but they make the writing less fluent and precise. Build a reliable set of collocations for work and health, and proofread carefully for spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish between exercise, physical activity, and workplace movement.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response uses mostly simple sentences, with some attempts to combine ideas through clauses, as in “Because of this, they do not get enough exercise.” The main message remains understandable, but there are some errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation. For example, “In yester years, mostly people do physical work that time…” joins ideas without a clear grammatical connection, while “we can said” uses an incorrect verb form. The conclusion also runs several ideas together with a comma rather than separating them into clear sentences. Practise forming accurate complex sentences with conjunctions such as “because” and “although,” and check subject–verb agreement, tense, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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