Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the modern era, many individuals have a hectic schedule and they do not have enough time for exercise which leads to serious health issues. But even in their free time they do not prefer to spend some time on exercise because of not doing it on regular base.They can make time table to solve this problem. In the upcoming paragraphs, I would like to shed light on the reasons behind this.

To begin with,many people do not like to do exercise during the working days or in their free time because they do not have a habit. They spend their whole free time on playing video games or on another stuff . In addition, when they came from work, some time they feel tired and prefer to sleep instead of doing some physical activities to stay healthy. For example, a survey was conducted by ABP news in India in 2023, which staed that 20% of worker preferd to sleep after their work insted of spending time on exercise, As a result, because of their habit they do not prefer to do exercise.

Furthermore, if they can make time table for their daily rountine then it will help them a lot to deal with this problem and stay healthy. This timetable will help them to understand how they are spending their time. For instance, a headline was published in Jag Bani newspaper in 2024 which stated that in India 55% of people were able to do exercise on their daily basic because they preferred to follow the time table for their daily rountine. As a result, changing in our daily habits will help us to stay healthy.

To conclude, some people are not able to do exercise because of habit but by following the daily time table they can change it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses both questions: it identifies lack of exercise habits, tiredness after work, and time spent on games as reasons, then proposes making a timetable. These points are relevant, and the examples about workers choosing sleep and people following routines attempt to support them. However, the explanation is only partly developed. The solution is largely limited to scheduling, without explaining how employers, workplaces, or individuals could make exercise practical when they are tired or busy. The examples are also presented as brief statistics rather than being connected in detail to the argument. A clearer explanation of why these barriers arise and a more fully explained range of practical measures would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on the proposed solution, and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally clear, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “To conclude” help readers follow the main stages. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, with repeated “As a result” and repeated references to habits and timetables. Some links between ideas are unclear: the opening mentions lack of time, but the causes paragraph focuses mainly on habits and tiredness without explicitly connecting these points. The conclusion also repeats the main points rather than drawing them together. Use more varied referencing and make the relationship between each explanation and its example explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main ideas, with relevant terms such as “hectic schedule,” “health issues,” “physical activities,” and “daily routine.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less natural. For example, “do not prefer to spend some time on exercise” would be more naturally expressed as “do not choose to exercise,” while “on another stuff” is imprecise. Spelling errors such as “staed,” “preferd,” “insted,” and “rountine” also reduce accuracy. Aim to use a wider range of precise expressions for barriers and solutions, and check spelling and common collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple sentences and attempts at complex structures, including clauses with “because,” “when,” and “which.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “when they came from work” uses an inappropriate tense, and “20% of worker preferd” has problems with plural agreement and verb form. The opening sentence also joins contrasting ideas with “But” in a way that would be clearer if the relationship were expressed within a complete sentence. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, as in “To begin with,many” and the missing space after “base.” Practise accurate past and present verb forms, plural nouns, and sentence boundaries while retaining the complex structures you are attempting.

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