Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Exercise is essential part of life. Eveyone should include little exercise or streching in their everyday rituals. It helps to make one fit and can have healthy lifestyle. Nowadays everyone focus to maintain their health.

There is issue for the people who couldn't able to complete their goals of exercise due to lack of time management. Many of them have to woke up early do other chores and after that they have to go for their respective jobs so they unable to go gym or can spend their time on exercise. eg: I am student i have to woke up early and complete my chores by doing that i never got time for exercise and i have to get ready for my college.

Even though person try to do exercise after coming home from thier work they couldn't do it because they were already got exhaused whole day. So they need some rest and have to complete their other works too.It's difficult to manage everything during hectic shedule.

As many people couldn't complete their fitness goal or not able to do exercise they have to suffer from many diseases or issues like diabeties, increase in weight. Due to all this problem people starts taking medicine without consultation and that would make it worse for them.eg: my friend don't got time for exercise and she starts taking medicines finding shortcuts to loose weight but it will not work it was causing other side effects.

What can be done to do exercise little -bit whenever possible for those who were remains busy everyday. One can buy equippments for home can starts doing little exercise when they got free. If not possible they start the music and dance or do little movement so one can enjoy it along with sweating. In morning yoga and little streching would be enough for 10-20 minutes it will make you fresh and feels better.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: lack of time and tiredness are given as reasons, and home exercise, dancing, yoga, and stretching are suggested as responses. The personal examples about your routine and your friend make the discussion relevant. However, the ideas are only partly developed. For instance, the time-management point could explain more clearly how work schedules or commuting restrict exercise, while the suggestions are listed without showing how employers or communities could help. The discussion of illness and your friend’s medication also takes space without directly explaining the main causes or offering a well-supported solution. Develop each key point with a clear explanation and a relevant example to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: it introduces exercise, gives reasons, discusses health consequences, and then offers solutions. This makes the main stages of the answer identifiable. However, progression between ideas is sometimes unclear, and several paragraphs combine points that would be easier to follow if separated or linked more explicitly. For example, the paragraph beginning “As many people couldn't complete their fitness goal” shifts from causes to health effects and then to a personal example. Connect ideas with accurate transitions and make each paragraph focus on one main point. Some linking phrases, such as “Even though,” do not clearly express the relationship intended, so simpler, more precise links would improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “exercise,” “fitness goal,” “diseases,” “yoga,” and “stretching.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “hectic schedule” and “side effects.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less clear: “complete their goals of exercise,” “taking medicines finding shortcuts,” and “make you fresh” are not natural in this context. Spelling errors such as “exhaused,” “diabeties,” and “equippments” are also noticeable. Build a bank of common health and work-related collocations, and check spelling and word forms when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “because” and “after,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently and can make the reader pause. Examples include “Everyone should include little exercise,” “they have to woke up,” and “they were already got exhausted.” There are also run-on sentences, such as the sentence beginning “One can buy equippments for home,” where several actions are joined without clear punctuation. Practise accurate past and present forms, subject–verb agreement, and article use, then divide longer ideas into complete sentences. Careful proofreading for punctuation and sentence boundaries would make your meaning easier to follow.

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