Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
It is true that the numbers of people can not do exercise during the working day or in the free time, and have the health issues as a result. In this statement, there are serval of reasons why working individuals not taking exercise along with the working day and the free time.
The first and foremost reason is that technology. Nowadays, the working people can spent a lot of time on the internet while doing pending office work as well as send emails related to our office. Moreover, in the working day, they can not do exercise because of busy life. In this way, they face many of health problems such as stress, depression, and more others.
The second reason is that they spent time free time on playing video games with near and dear once. Which cause the health related issues such as lack of sleep and effect on the eyesight. For example, in the survey of 2007, many expertise examined that 90% of people suffered health problem such as stress an depression lack of exercise because they can not taking health relation exercise every day.
Lastly, i think that working people should join the gym during the working day and their free time which can help to reduce the health problems as well as eat the healthy food. Moreover, in the free time, they can watch the different and easy exercise which can help to save the time. Furthermore, they can go park with their friends in free time for feel relax and calm.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the explanation regarding technology is brief and lacks depth, and the second reason regarding video games is somewhat repetitive. The examples provided, such as the 'survey of 2007', are vague and lack specific detail to fully support the argument. While the response covers all parts of the task, the ideas are under-developed, and the overall position could be more clearly articulated throughout the essay to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, the transition 'In this statement' is used incorrectly at the beginning, and phrases like 'more others' and 'near and dear once' disrupt the flow. While there is a logical progression from reasons to solutions, the connections between sentences are sometimes weak, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, which affects the overall coherence of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'near and dear once' (instead of 'ones'), 'health relation exercise', and 'for feel relax'. The range is limited, and the student relies on basic terminology. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication, such as 'the numbers of people can not do exercise', 'they can not taking', and 'many expertise examined'. Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and verb tense usage prevents the essay from achieving a higher score in this category.
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