Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Majority of the working professionals are suffering from the health dieseaes because they are not able to perform the exercises or perform less exercises on their working days as wells as on their leisure time. In my opinion, their busy working arrangements is the primary reason, why working people do not get enough exercise. To overcome this issue of the health problems, employers need to open the excercise rooms in their offices.

There are ample evidences to suggest that, busy working arrangements are the primary reason about not to doing the enough exercise or no exercise by the working employees. Working professional seems always in hurry to reach at the office on time. If they can not reach on time, employers are used to cut the half of his that day's salary from their paycheque. For that reason, individuals do not want to waster their time by doing the exercises after waking up in the mornings. Also, for saving the time to reach at their destinations, they are more willing to use their private vehicle. After coming back from their work, majority members of the working society are feeling very tired due to the work stress and do not wish to go to the exercises centers, such as, gym and yoga classes. As a result, they are suffering from the such a detrimental health problems, such as back issue, knee problem, and obesity. For example, a survey conducted on the working individuals in the cambridge city by the university of cambridge, shows 60 percentage of the employees are not able to go to the gym and yoga classes due to their busy work.

To solve the issue of the health problems that are suffered by working professionals, employers need to add exercise rooms such as gym in their premises. After seeing the gym into the office, employyes are encouraged to go there, as they think, their employer want them to do some exercise. This is how, it can become their daily routine to visit their office gym and doing some exercises. As a result they can easily coming out form the fatal disease which might be occured due to their busy lifestyle. For example, majority of the employees who are attending their office gym have no or little health issues, according to the reseach conducted in India on the working professionals.

In conclusion, If employer is taking some initiative related to the good wellbing of their employees, majority of the health dieases can be diminisehd from the working individuals who can not do exercises in their daily routine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for lack of exercise and potential solutions. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and relies on generalizations. For instance, the argument regarding employers cutting salaries for lateness is a specific, albeit slightly narrow, explanation for time constraints. The solutions provided are relevant, but the supporting examples, such as the mention of a survey in Cambridge, lack sufficient detail to fully elevate the response. To improve, ensure that each point is explored with more depth rather than restating the same premise in different ways.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'As a result', 'For example', and 'In conclusion', which help guide the reader. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. There are instances where the flow between sentences feels a bit disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the problem from the solution, which aids the overall structure. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the transition between ideas is smoother and less predictable.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'health dieseaes', 'waster their time', and 'good wellbing'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic terms like 'busy working arrangements' and 'do not get enough exercise'. While the meaning is clear, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'dieseaes', 'diminisehd', 'reseach') prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Incorporating more topic-specific collocations and ensuring accurate spelling would significantly improve the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with articles ('the exercises', 'the gym'), subject-verb agreement ('employyes are encouraged'), and preposition usage ('reach at the office'). Some sentences are clunky, such as 'After seeing the gym into the office', which hinders readability. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically article usage and verb forms, before attempting more complex structures.

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