Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The Majority of the working professionals are suffering from disease because they are not able to perform exercises or perform less exercises on their working days as wells as on their leisure time. In my opinion, their busy working arrangement is the primary reason, why working people do not get enough exercise. To overcome this issue of the health problems, employers need to open the exercise rooms in their offices.

There are ample evidences to suggest that, busy working arrangements are the primary reason for not doing the enough exercise or no exercise by the working employees. Working professionals seem always in a hurry to reach at the office on time. If they can not reach on time, employers are used to cut the half of his that day's salary from their paycheque. For that reason, individuals do not want to waste their time by doing the exercises after waking up in the mornings. Also, for saving the time to reach at their destinations, they are more willing to use their private vehicle. After coming back from their work, majority members of the working society are feeling very tired due to the work stress and do not wish to go to the exercise centers, such as, gym and yoga classes. As a result, they are suffering from such a detrimental health problems, such as back issue, knee problem, and obesity. For example, a survey conducted on the working individuals in the Cambridge city by the university of Cambridge, shows 60 percentage of the employees are not able to go to the gym and yoga classes due to their busy work.

To solve the issue of the health problems that are suffered by working professionals, employers need to add exercise rooms such as gym in their premises. After seeing the gym into the office, employees are encouraged to go there, as they think, their employer want them to do some exercise. This is how, it can become their daily routine to visit their office gym and doing some exercises. As a result they can easily coming out form the fatal disease which might be occurred due to their busy lifestyle. For example, majority of the employees who are attending their office gym have no or little health issues, according to the research conducted in India on the working professionals.

In conclusion, If employer is taking some initiative related to the good wellbeing of their employees, majority of the health diseases can be diminished from the working individuals who can not do exercises in their daily routine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. The position is clear throughout, and the ideas are supported with examples, such as the mention of office-based gym facilities. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive, and the arguments could be more nuanced. For instance, the focus on 'salary cuts' as a primary reason for not exercising in the morning is a bit narrow. To reach a higher band, ensure that the supporting examples are more logically integrated and that the analysis of the problem is broader in scope.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a progression of ideas from the problem to the solution. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'For that reason', 'Also', and 'In conclusion', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. Referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the flow between sentences could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall structure helps the reader follow the argument without difficulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express ideas clearly. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'detrimental', 'diminished', and 'fatal disease', though the usage is occasionally slightly unnatural or imprecise (e.g., 'fatal disease' is likely too strong for obesity or back pain). There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'ample evidences' (evidence is uncountable) and 'seeing the gym into the office'. These errors do not impede communication but limit the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the Cambridge city', 'the university of Cambridge'), subject-verb agreement, and verb forms (e.g., 'they can easily coming out form'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some awkward phrasings that affect the flow. The errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points. More attention to basic grammar rules would improve the accuracy significantly.

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