Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the phenomenal,every people are heavy work load and lack of time spending our health and some exercise these days.While are must priorities of people how a manage work and some exercise daily life those are many views for manage daily life by people.I believe them whole humans life must priorities how to perfectly health log time and can more time spend the family and friends.
On the one hand,In the whole world faced hasal and basal life then increase detrimental perspective by people.However,They are many optimistice of prespective due to lack of time self,heavy work load.Although,There are increase many stress,anxiety
,headaches and depression being lack of enough exercise by results.For example,One of a article mentioned them whole world most impotant focose Work life of balance.
On the other hand, There are during more exercise they are incerese physical and mental health an improve by people.Therefore,They take strike follow time table which time spend time some exercise.Moreover,They can how to spend time our sport activities and take the meditation and yoga.For instance,Many docters suggest every people their should manage work and some exercise avery day another thinks must impotant the sport activities and can do yoga and meditation every day.
In conclusion,Although people not manage work and execise due to lack time every day other heavy work load.Furthermore,There multifarious benefits become follow as per time tabel daily life and among take sports activities and take the yoga and meditation daily based.There are about work life balance must important in whole peple life because of health is most priorities every humans life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for inactivity (workload, lack of time) and solutions (time management, exercise, meditation). However, the development of these ideas is significantly hampered by unclear expression and fragmented sentences. While the writer attempts to provide examples, such as mentioning 'a article' or 'doctors', the lack of clarity makes it difficult to follow the logic. The position is generally clear, but the lack of coherent explanation means the ideas are not fully developed or supported in a way that meets the requirements for a higher band. The response is essentially a series of loosely connected points rather than a cohesive argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion', but they are often applied incorrectly or in a way that does not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. For instance, the transition 'Although,There are increase many stress' is confusing. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to determine the subject of the sentences. Overall, the progression of ideas is disjointed, and the lack of control over cohesive devices makes the text difficult to read.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous instances of word-choice errors, such as 'In the phenomenal' (likely meant 'In the present day'), 'faced hasal and basal life' (meaning unclear), and 'take strike follow time table'. The writer attempts to use more complex vocabulary like 'multifarious' and 'detrimental', but these are used in contexts that do not make sense. The repetition of basic words and the inability to use collocations correctly significantly limit the range of expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject and verb, such as 'In the phenomenal,every people are heavy work load'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and incorrect capitalization. While the writer attempts to use complex structures, these are almost always faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. Simple sentences are also prone to errors, which means the reader must constantly re-read to understand the intended meaning.
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