Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
There is no denying the fact that the phenomenon of exercise is ubiquitous across the globe, Due to its paramount importance. One school of thought opine that why many working masses do not do exercise and what should to be done this problem. Therefore, both the question answer are articulated in the trail paragraphs with the reason for my inclination.
Commencing with the working people who do not do exercise just because they are busy in their hectic life. To elaborate more masses who do not do enough exercise they must be lazy or busy in their work life. Moreover todays era people are more enhance to earn money and just they do their jobs and after that they feels very low in their life. To example, large population in India they do not go to gym or any activites they helps in health just because after finish a work they feel lazy and in the early morning they can not wake up early, That stands as a paragon. Thats why many people who working they do not do enough exercise.
Secoundly if people do not go for gym or any exercise that person many be suffor from obesity and over weait. This is beacuse if people just do eating and not going for any exercise in the future they will be over weait and also their imaunity power will decline. For instance, In Africa news paper data say that 75 % people suffor form obesity just because of they eat more and do not do any activities or exercise that helps them to over come that problem.That stands as an epitome. Thus this are the problem people will face if they do not do enough exercise.
On the close scrutiny, I conclude that in this topic just because of people work more and have hactic life they can not do enough exercise and for that reason they will face problem like obesity and ovr weaith.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, but the development is limited. While you identify reasons for the lack of exercise (hectic life, laziness), the second part of the prompt—what can be done about the problem—is almost entirely ignored. You focus on the consequences (obesity) rather than proposing solutions. The ideas are repetitive and lack depth, often relying on generalizations rather than clear, logical arguments. To improve, ensure you dedicate specific paragraphs to both 'reasons' and 'solutions' as requested by the task instructions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Transitions like 'Commencing with' and 'On the close scrutiny' are used, but they often feel mechanical or are used incorrectly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'do exercise' and 'work'. There are also several spelling errors ('imaunity', 'suffor', 'hactic', 'ovr weaith') and word-choice inaccuracies ('more enhance to earn money', 'paragon', 'epitome'). These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations related to health and lifestyle and ensure you are using words in their correct context rather than relying on memorized phrases that do not fit the sentence structure.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('masses who do not do enough exercise they must be'), sentence fragments, and incorrect verb forms ('what should to be done'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in basic syntax. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses.
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