Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many workers individuals get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their leisure time, and they have health problems as a result. The many working people not get enough exercise because the public are busy in daily schedule and some people are lazing habitats.
First, they have lots of work from the office so they are finishing their work. However, they have no time to enjoy their free times. Whereas, they are reducing their exercise, unstable diet and many more thing they are ignoring. Besides this, the individuals are facing health issues such as BP lower, Sugar and many more affects their health. Then, they are frustration ,irritation and rude behaviour from their work and family.
Furthermore, there are solutions for this problem in the first solution, they should manage their time and energy to complete their work on right time. If they are going for walking and jogging in early morning so they can enjoy their leisure time so their mind is freshness and relaxation from work. For instance, they should spend time with family and friends in free time. Moreover, they should do exercise for better maintain their fitness and healthy lifestyle For example, if they are doing exercise so they are not facing health problem and if they are changing the eat time on right and balanced diets.
In conclusion, they are changing their schedule and manage their time and leisure activities so there are no health issues and they can lives better lifestyle and healthy life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is limited. The reasons provided, such as 'lots of work' and 'lazing habitats' (lazy habits), are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The solutions are also presented in a simplistic manner, focusing on general advice like 'manage their time' without exploring the broader societal or structural factors involved. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments lack specific examples or detailed analysis, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Whereas, they are reducing their exercise' is used incorrectly, and 'in the first solution' is an awkward way to introduce a point. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly within the second paragraph where the link between work pressure and health issues is not clearly articulated. While there is an overall attempt at a logical flow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and occasional confusion in referencing makes the cohesion feel forced.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'lazing habitats' instead of 'lazy habits', 'BP lower' instead of 'low blood pressure', and 'eat time' instead of 'mealtimes'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, relying on basic terms like 'many more thing' and 'better maintain'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in collocation and word formation significantly restrict the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often grammatically flawed, such as 'if they are doing exercise so they are not facing health problem'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, article usage, and tense consistency (e.g., 'they can lives better lifestyle'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. These errors are frequent and occasionally cause the reader to pause, though they do not completely impede communication.
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