Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
These days many working people get a little or no exercise during the working day or in there free time. Which result in health problems.There are different aspects due to which people are unable to do a exercise on daily basis. Which are explaind in detail in below peragraph.
Regular exercise keeps body fit and healty. Which increase the self confidence and well being. However, it's not easy to follow this practice . Many people are unable to do the regular excercise due to long working hours. They have to work 6 days a week from 9am to 7pm.Due to which they get very little free time. Which they spend with their families and doing other house chores.Moreover, Many people starts excercise in some stage of their life but can not keep it up with the dicipline.For example, every year many peoples new years resolution was is to start a daily excercise and they do it for a few days or weeks but after few days they go back to their normal life and spend most of their free time in leisure activities like social media and watching tv.
To solve this problem it is important to encourage people to change their life style to avoid health problems. They can also do it by participating in a sport of their like. Playing sport is a good excercise and it has other benefits as well like it help people to socialise and take their mind of from their work or other life problems.
To conclude, it is important in life to do a regular exercise with dicipline, to stay healthy and people should manage their shedule to get a free time to do the exercise on daily basis.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding long working hours is clear, but the second point about 'discipline' is less effectively linked to the broader societal context. The solutions provided are somewhat generic, such as 'encouraging people to change their lifestyle,' which lacks specific detail or depth. To reach a higher band, you should provide more concrete examples or elaborate further on the consequences and the feasibility of the proposed solutions. The position is clear, but the overall depth of the argument remains at a basic level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by sentence fragments and awkward transitions. For instance, sentences like 'Which result in health problems' and 'Which are explaind in detail in below peragraph' are grammatically incomplete and disrupt the cohesion. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'To conclude,' the connection between ideas is often mechanical. The paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the sophisticated linking required for higher bands. Improving the use of complex sentences and avoiding fragmented clauses would significantly enhance the readability and logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'good exercise' and 'doing other house chores.' There are several spelling errors, such as 'healty,' 'excercise,' 'dicipline,' and 'shedule,' which occur frequently. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of range and the recurring spelling mistakes limit the score. To improve, you should focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring the correct spelling of common academic and general vocabulary. Expanding your range to include more topic-specific terminology related to health and lifestyle would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Many people starts'), incorrect use of articles, and the frequent use of sentence fragments starting with 'Which.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of full stops and commas. While you attempt complex structures, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence boundaries and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb will help improve your accuracy.
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