Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's era, many people are health conscience related to their health. Although individuals safer from health decease, they do not do any yoga or exercise to keep them healthy, due to the busy schedule they are not able to find a spare time for gym or yoga classes.

One of the primary reason is that because of workload and hectic schedule citizen often feel restless. Foe example, working in a full time hours like 8-9 hours. Moreover, a company also gives presser to do overtime to finish office work or any projects, also included travelling hours make people more tired. As a result of that, they do not have any energy to do exercise not even a yoga to relax their body. Hence, people often suffer from health issue like obesity, diabetes, high blood presser etc. make them ill.

However, individual them self take action to create a health life style. To exemplify this, if person wakes up early and do some yoga or exercise, an entire working day they feel fresh and energetic. In addition to that because of that their mind is quite relax and active, that can create a high level of thinking and its help in office task. As a consequences of that, their lifestyle goes automatically healthy and have physically fit.

In the nutshell, working as a employer or having a business make busy life and end of the day often feel tired create no extra work or no gym. However, if individuals believe their self they can build happy and healthy lifestyle with exercises.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on why people do not exercise focuses almost exclusively on 'hectic schedules' and 'tiredness,' without exploring other factors like sedentary office culture or lack of motivation. The solutions provided are also quite general, focusing on waking up early, which may not be practical for all working individuals. To improve, you should aim to provide more nuanced arguments and concrete examples that go beyond personal habits, such as workplace wellness programs or government initiatives.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In the nutshell' (should be 'In a nutshell') and 'As a consequences of that' are used incorrectly. Additionally, the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition from workload to health issues feels abrupt. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help create a smoother progression of ideas throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'health conscience' (instead of 'health-conscious'), 'health decease' (instead of 'health diseases'), and 'presser' (instead of 'pressure'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the range of vocabulary is restricted to basic terms. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to health and workplace issues and ensure that words are used in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('individual them self take action'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing ('working as a employer'). While the meaning is usually clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that prepositions and articles are used correctly before attempting more complex structures.

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