Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I strongly believe that many working people would do little exercise in day to day activities and it would create health related problems.

In my opinion, this is more common in working people.

The major reason is that working people is always busy in commute long distance for works, meetings and business. This would create problem to focus on another activities. For many people, this would be not possible because they have to maintain after work family time and spend some quality time with kids. In addition, they forget take care of personal well-being and fitness.

If peoples are more focused on health problems they might be follow schedule and eating healthy meal in daily basis. It would also make their daily routine easier and more comfortable. For many people, this would save time and reduce unnecessary stress. Working people get little more focused on dietary plans, yoga and consume nutrional food. They might be avoid junk food in day to day. I hope this solutions would work well.

I understand some people may prefer spend more time with family because they have follow daily routine. However, doing exercise has more benefits in the future well-being and you have do exercise at home as well. I think this would help resolve the situation in a better way.

After considering all point of view, I firmly believe that working people should have give small amount time for personal well-being. It is more convenient and not to prevent any health problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. However, the development is limited. The reasons provided—long commutes and family commitments—are relevant but lack depth or specific examples. The solutions, such as dietary changes and home exercise, are mentioned but not fully explored. Furthermore, the response is slightly under the 250-word minimum, which impacts the overall development of the argument. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your ideas with more detailed explanations and concrete examples to ensure the response is fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, 'This would create' and 'For many people' are used frequently as sentence starters. The logical progression between ideas is sometimes weak, particularly in the transition between the problem and the solution. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'busy', 'problem', and 'good'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'maintain after work family time' and 'nutrional food' (spelling error). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations related to health and lifestyle, such as 'sedentary lifestyle', 'time-management strategies', or 'nutritionally dense'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('working people is always busy', 'If peoples are more focused'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('they might be follow schedule'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms will help improve your accuracy.

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