Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It has been universally accepted that problems caused by lack of exercise are escalating at an alarming rate. The problem is bringing a state of depression and many serious diseases among the masses. There are number of reasons of the same and its possible solutions can be suggested too which are discussed as follows.

Body paragraph 1

In regards to the problem, the major reason which can be stated is busy schedule at work. In support to this reason, a fact is employees are overwhelmed with heavy workload, which forces them to spend long hours at work. Aa a result, they do not get enough time to do physical activities. Another problematic cause is lack of motivation. If exercise is not a part of individual's daily routine. Then, they are more likely to ignore or postponing it.

Body paragraph 2

Seeing the problem with a brighter mind, many of solutions can be helpful to curb this menace. One if the solution is establishment of limit on working hours. Government to strictly made companies follow those rule and regulations including big industrial companies. Secondly, awareness campaigns should promote to encourage people to exercise at high level. So that these can reach to wide population. For example, internet or other social media platforms can be used to interact with public to talk about health issues related to less physical activities.

Conclusion

To conclude, solving a global issue is not easy but with the joint efforts of the people, a control can be taken over the problem with the aforementioned suggested measures. I believe that everyone should come forward to resolve this problem and make the world healthier.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as long working hours and lack of motivation, and the solutions provided, like government regulation and awareness campaigns, are logical. However, the development is somewhat limited. For instance, the suggestion to 'limit working hours' is a good idea but lacks specific detail on how this would realistically be implemented or how it would directly lead to more exercise. The response covers all requirements but remains at a general level of discussion, which prevents it from reaching a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In regards to the problem', 'Another problematic cause', and 'To conclude'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the phrase 'Seeing the problem with a brighter mind'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the overall flow is somewhat disjointed due to the repetitive nature of the linking phrases.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'escalating', 'alarming rate', and 'menace'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'Government to strictly made companies follow those rule' (should be 'Government should strictly make companies follow those rules') and 'encourage people to exercise at high level'. These errors do not impede communication but demonstrate a limited range and control over more sophisticated lexical items.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the writer attempts complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb forms, articles, and sentence fragments. For example, 'If exercise is not a part of individual's daily routine. Then, they are more likely to ignore or postponing it' contains a sentence fragment and an incorrect verb form. Other errors include 'One if the solution' and 'Government to strictly made'. These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text, though they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the intended message.

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