Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, health is very important for everyone. Some people are doing little bit exercise as many of them doing nothing to keep their body fit and facing a lot of health issues. I will discuss the main reasons in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, most of the people are busy in their daily routine while doing a job and business because of that they have a busy schedule and less free time. Due to this, many of them face health problems like, obesity and other serious issues which effect their body. Secondly, some people are very lazy to do activities and have bad eating habits cause health problems. Moreover, while sitting on bed and lack of movement of their body. So, they feel sickness and suffer from a lot of diseases.

On the other hand, to tackle these kind of problems Firstly, people have to do more physical activities to maintain their health and keep body fit and healthy. By doing a lot of exercise like, Yoga and join Gym to protect the body from serious diseases. Furthermore, people also have to avoid eating the fast food to save their body from diseases which are harmful sometimes and cause serious health issues.

To conclude, by doing little exercises and change in eating habits can save the people from many diseases and help them to keep their body fit and healthy. Moreover, while walking after a meal is beneficial as well to tackle the serious health issues and protect the body from diseases,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for inactivity and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is limited. The reasons provided (busy schedules, laziness, bad eating habits) are mentioned but not fully explored or supported with specific examples or logical depth. The solutions (exercise, joining a gym, avoiding fast food) are also presented in a somewhat superficial manner. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points by explaining the 'how' and 'why' more thoroughly. For instance, instead of just stating that people are busy, you could explain how modern sedentary office culture contributes to this lack of physical movement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Secondly', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the logical progression within paragraphs is occasionally disrupted by fragmented phrasing, such as 'Moreover, while sitting on bed and lack of movement of their body.' This makes the connection between ideas feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next will significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'doing', 'good', 'bad', and 'serious'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'doing little bit exercise' instead of 'getting little exercise' or 'doing a bit of exercise'. The phrase 'feel sickness' is also unnatural; 'feel unwell' or 'suffer from health issues' would be more appropriate. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to health and lifestyle, and focus on using more precise verbs and adjectives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many of them doing nothing'), article usage (e.g., 'join Gym'), and sentence fragments (e.g., 'Moreover, while sitting on bed...'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article placement.

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