Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I think exercise is good for health. Also know " health for good wealth in our like balancing.'" The balance life is good for health is a good more energetic sentence but we realized some unfair condition to follow our mind. SO first think wealth.

When you have a free time, got the exercise and pic up the running, cardio, Zumba, clapping hands, good making for you as best realized to fulfilled all day in freshness in your face. its a good able to make decision do not skip the chance. We have a lot of ideas, but rather then you don't follow the dream or do today not make happy tomorrow.

While, In good think about the done no any problem to everybody. Make in a good sense flow or health ration for fever, omitting, bad rest criteria, hearth patient its a good for the exercise make the results very day.

In some of reason we give all suggestion then its a harm and molded happiness. so its a our choice to make happy regard the closed out moment very provisional expertise.

keep you balancing or your weight - yoga, Gym, Zumba, dance al other type of ward much greate then your different ideas.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the prompt effectively. While it mentions exercise, it does not clearly explain why working people lack time for it, nor does it provide concrete solutions. The ideas are fragmented and lack development, making it difficult to follow the argument. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which severely limits the ability to develop the topic. The content is largely incoherent, preventing the reader from understanding the writer's position on the issue.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and progression. Paragraphs are not used effectively to structure ideas, and the flow between sentences is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices, and where they are attempted, they are used incorrectly (e.g., 'While, In good think...'). The lack of clear transitions makes the text difficult to follow, and the overall structure does not support the development of a coherent argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often used incorrectly, leading to confusion. Phrases like 'good making for you' and 'bad rest criteria' do not convey clear meaning. There is a lack of control over word choice and collocation, and the vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas about health or lifestyle. The repetition of basic words and the misuse of terminology significantly impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is highly problematic throughout the response. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order, such as 'The balance life is good for health is a good more energetic sentence'. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear grammatical subject and predicate. The range of structures is very limited, and the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand.

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