Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

being a balance life , exercise have vital role in human life bur during our routine activities , we always ignore as we are not aware of it consequences which comes in old ages resulted health problems to be started before any individual get old. I am going to describe my point of view in coming paragraphs

Health , wealth and prosperity always support to any personality to make his name in society but it would be start from health as no one can achieve other two mile stone if any one could no be health . Human most of time running behind success and managing all priority to achieve his life or financial goal but failed to manage time for exercise .Especially in modern era when most of peoples are leaving in nuclear families where they have to manage children after job and working till long hours to maintained financial requirements so they can compromised only with their on requirements like exercise .

I am no denning, human is too busy now days but technology have vital role to make human life easy as it does not mean that we have to do exercise in GYM only , we can do yoga at home by making group with in family moreover it provide opportunity to your children to participate and get learn new skill and any individual can spent time with family , other than all Government or management has to make GMY inside office premises and encourage people to participate or if possible make one weekly completion or reward program as healthy workers always helps to employer .

in conclusion , exercise having important role in human life to make him fit and healthy so we have to mange proper slot of exercise in our our day routine

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the explanation regarding 'nuclear families' is a relevant point, but it lacks specific detail or depth to fully explore the societal pressures involved. The solutions provided, such as office gyms and family yoga, are relevant but could be expanded upon with more concrete examples or logical consequences. The position is clear, but the overall development is limited by the brevity of the arguments and the lack of sophisticated supporting evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'moreover' and 'in conclusion', the transitions between sentences are often mechanical or unclear. The referencing is sometimes confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between 'health, wealth and prosperity' and the main topic of exercise is not smoothly integrated. The paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear, cohesive progression of thought.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'being a balance life', 'no denning', and 'make GMY'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use less common items accurately. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning collocations and ensuring that words are used in the correct context, rather than attempting to use complex words that result in unnatural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('exercise have', 'technology have'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, which makes the text difficult to follow. There is a limited range of complex structures, and when they are attempted, they are often inaccurate. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces before commas and missing full stops. The high frequency of errors significantly impacts the clarity of the message throughout the response.

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