Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Number of working individuals do not do exercises in their free time because of many reasons. The first and foremost one is low energy. For instance, when people go to work they do not have have enough time to perpare their food at home, they like to buy from the shops like pizza burgers or tim hortons. As a result, they do not taking good protiens food which make their body feel sleepy and they got tired and like to have rest rest in thier free time or after coming back from work. The second reason for not doing practice in free time is mobiles. for example, Everyone like to watch reels or play games on mobiles and thwy waste thier energy on these things due to which when they think to do any workout beacuse of low level of energy they are unable do to any physical activities and they like to sleep.
There are some solutions to overcome these problems, the first one is Good healthy diet plan. To elaborate it, when people will eat protein food according to their body weight and need they will be able genrate their energy. Hence, they will be having enough after coming from work and utilise that energy to their workouts. Secondly, Avoid using of mobiles and telephones. To be more clear, People are using most of time their mobiles or watch television in there free times. Individuals should try to spend less time on these things and try to go on walk with family which will help them to stay healthy and fit.
AS a consequence, there are numerous reasons for not going outside to do physical exercises for individuals after their jobs but theses can be tackled the solutions given in the above paragraph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for lack of exercise and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the link between diet and exercise is mentioned but lacks depth, and the explanation regarding mobile phone usage is repetitive. The ideas are relevant but could be extended with more specific examples or logical progression to reach a higher band. The position is clear throughout, but the overall development remains basic, fitting the criteria for a band 5.5 to 6.0 range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'The first and foremost one', 'The second reason', 'the first one is'). There are instances where the flow between sentences is disjointed, such as the transition between the diet discussion and the mobile phone point. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the concluding paragraph is quite brief and does not effectively summarise the main points, leading to a score of 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, such as the repeated use of 'energy', 'things', and 'good'. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'doing practice' instead of 'exercising' and 'protiens food'. Spelling errors like 'perpare', 'thier', and 'genrate' are frequent and occasionally distract the reader. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the presence of errors in basic vocabulary prevent a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Everyone like to watch'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('they do not taking good protiens food'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is usually clear, the high frequency of errors and the lack of complex structures limit the score. To improve, focus on sentence variety and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy.
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