Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

At present, the ratio of health disease has been increasing day by day. Majority of working individuals do little or no exercise weather during working day or in their leisure time, sue to this they are facing several health issues. Although nowadays masses have busy schedules where they did not get time to focus on physical work, it can be tacked by taking some initiatives, opening new fitness areas at work and in a local areas free of cost. All the reasons along with solutions are explicated in the following paragraphs.

To commence with, there are ample of reasons why people do not get time to work on their physical health after their work. The first and foremost, in this modern world, people have been following very busy routine. In other words, humans are doing more than one job due to fulfill their needs, also people have all kind of amenities including phones, laptops which do not allow them to do any exercise, in their free time or after coming from work they prefer to spend their time for entertaining themselves. For example, numerous number of youth workers who prefer to watch videos in their phone while coming form work or while travelling due to tiredness. Thus, it is clear that it will people spend their time on using technology and working too hard, which make them physically ill and do not allow them to exercise.

Despite, this situation can be teckel by taking some steps. Firstly, organization can open new areas where people can exercise and motivate them to do so. To explain it, if natives get chance to do exercise at work as well as companies should have to inspire them to exercise which will also beneficial for the organization due to their workers always feel energetic and come for work without taking any leave. To cite an example, In the USA, one organization whose boss allow them to do their meetings and work while with cycling, which assist them to leave fit and healthy. Hence, it will make people to become healthy person and focus on themselves.

In conclusion, it can be reiterated that many people are working more than one job and prefer to use their gadgets in their free time which make them unfit, however it can be overcome by taking some steps: giving them environment at work to do exercise.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as busy schedules and the impact of technology, and the solutions, like workplace fitness initiatives, are practical. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the example of the USA organization is a bit vague, and the explanation of why technology prevents exercise could be more nuanced. The position is clear throughout, but the overall depth of analysis is limited, which prevents it from reaching a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Despite', and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical or awkward transitions, such as 'Despite, this situation can be teckel'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the use of cohesive devices is occasionally repetitive or slightly forced. While the overall progression is coherent, the management of cohesion is not always smooth or flexible.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'explicated', 'amenities', and 'reiterated'. However, there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'ratio of health disease' (instead of 'incidence of health problems'), 'weather' (instead of 'whether'), and 'teckel' (instead of 'tackled'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent the message from being understood.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the writer attempts complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'numerous number of youth workers who prefer to watch videos in their phone' and 'which make them unfit'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, preposition usage, and article placement. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent and occur throughout the text, indicating a lack of control over more complex grammatical structures.

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