Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is undeniable that no excercise by working professional has become an increasingly pressing issue in many parts of the world. This essay will examine the main problems associated with no workouts by working people and propose some practical measures that could be taken to address them.

There are several significant problems arising from no workout. The most serious concern is that working professionals does not prefer to further work on their selfs. This is largely because by doing work whole day becoming stressful, which can lead to several health issues such as back pain, stress on eyes and headaches. For example, one of my colleague was sitting on a chair when he tried to stand up he was unable to do it, later out found that his spinal muscle has been reptured due to continous sitting. Another major issue while doing work your energy has been drained and you don't want to work further either on yourself. If people keep following this pattern in their working life and didn't focus on themselves, thereby affecting every working individuals health in the long term.

Nevertherless, there are a number of effective measure that could be implemented to tackle thesse problems. One particularly effective solution would be from companies should give enough time to employees to stay fit. This could be achieved by giving allocated time to excersice, and as a result their productivity can also be increased. In addition, eomployers should provide small facilities in workplace for the workers to encourage them. If these measures were implemented effectively, they would significantly reduce major health issues.

In conclusion, no excercise gives rise to several health problems, particularly due to stressed out and no energy left. However, these issues can be mitigated through giving allocated time & providing adequate facilities. A coordinated effort from organizations would therefore be essential to bring about a long-term improvement in this area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as the impact of sedentary work and the role of employers in providing facilities. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation of why people do not exercise is repetitive, focusing heavily on 'stress' and 'drained energy' without exploring other factors like commuting or lifestyle choices. The solutions are practical but could be expanded with more specific examples. Overall, the position is clear, but the depth of analysis is consistent with a band 6 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'The most serious concern', 'In addition', and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is slightly unclear, such as the transition between the colleague example and the general statement about energy. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the problem and solution sections, which helps the reader follow the argument, but the overall progression could be smoother with more varied linking words.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors ('excercise', 'selfs', 'reptured', 'continous', 'tackle thesse', 'eomployers') which occasionally distract the reader. The range of vocabulary is limited; for example, the word 'work' is used repeatedly in different contexts. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific language like 'sedentary' or 'mitigated', the overall control is inconsistent. To reach a higher band, the student needs to focus on accurate spelling and using a wider range of synonyms to avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('working professionals does not prefer'), incorrect verb forms ('his spinal muscle has been reptured'), and awkward phrasing ('no excercise by working professional'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of '&' and missing commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. The student should focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips.

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