Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is undeniably true that a good health leads to happy life journey. Owing to this, a large number of people believe that in these days, rather than to do exercises in their free time more and more people do long hours shift which leads to the certain health issues. There are some of the reasons for this phenomenon. However, it also has some possible solution that helps to resolve this issue, which will be elaborated in the subsequent segments.

Commencing with the most prominent reason why people do work in their leisure time. To be clear, in order to accomplish their basic necessities and dreams human try to do work overtime, which helps in good earning with handsome salaries, even better saving for future as well. Moreover, because of their working project goals. Employees have to be work in their leisure time which leads to get higher position at their workplace. Hence, in order to complete task before due time they have to work for long hours due to this people do not get enough time for their health.

Moving further towards the solution, authorities and hiring managers should hire staff on well desired salary along with this they have to give them divergent bonus in their salary so that they can fulfill their needs and dreams to live a luxurious life. To cite an example, according to the report of survey that was conducted by WHO in 2025, revealed that companies should gave 1 hour break to their employees to not only to solve the problem of obesity but also some other health issue which occur from long time shifts. This is the best for both organizations and staff.

In conclusion, it is evident that by analyzing the aforementioned domains more and more people get little exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems. But, with the help of Law maker and HR this problem can be tackled easily.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the explanation regarding why people work overtime focuses on financial necessity and career advancement, but the link to health is stated rather than deeply explored. The solution section is also quite general, relying on the idea of 'higher salaries' and 'breaks' without discussing the broader cultural or structural changes needed. While the response covers all parts of the task, the ideas could be extended with more specific examples or nuanced reasoning to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Commencing with', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion'. However, some of these transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural in context. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear; for example, the phrase 'aforementioned domains' in the conclusion does not accurately refer back to the specific reasons or solutions discussed. While the overall structure is logical, the flow between sentences could be improved to make the connections between ideas more seamless.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their points clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'phenomenon', 'subsequent', and 'divergent', though some of these are used with slight inaccuracies in collocation (e.g., 'divergent bonus'). There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'Law maker' instead of 'policymakers' or 'legislators'. The range is sufficient to communicate the message, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'a good health leads to happy life journey' (missing articles), 'rather than to do exercises' (incorrect infinitive usage), and 'companies should gave' (incorrect verb tense). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with sentence fragments and comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to demonstrate a lack of control over complex structures, which is a characteristic of the 5.0 to 6.0 range.

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