Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This growing influence of this topic of working people get little or no exercise during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result impacts both individual and communities
Firstly, people are not aware of health problems they get in future, they are busy working day and night many people work in night shifts which can lead to many health issues like, week eye sight, hair fall, its effects on brain and heart, majority of working people are not doing exercise reasons are due to busy schedule, they feel tired after work, and in their free time they want to rest, but as a result this can effects on both physical and mental health problems, like obesity.
For example: People should go for morning walks for 1 hour, should take healthy diet, should do some exercise or yoga, to stay fit and healthy, or meditations, join gym and should not take burned of work on them do work on time
This can help manage both mental and physical health
according to my experience i was working 9 to 5 at company due to my busy schedule i cannot do exercise i face a lot of problems for example i was
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay addresses both parts of the prompt—reasons for lack of exercise and potential solutions—the ideas are underdeveloped and lack depth. The personal example provided at the end is incomplete, cutting off abruptly. To improve, you must expand on your points with more detailed explanations and ensure the essay reaches the required length to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks clear paragraphing and logical progression. Ideas are presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, and the transition between the reasons for inactivity and the suggested solutions is abrupt. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas effectively. For example, the transition from discussing health issues to suggesting solutions is missing a clear signpost. To improve, use linking words such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in order to address this' to guide the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic phrasing. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'take burned of work' and 'week eye sight' (weak eyesight). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to health and lifestyle, and try to avoid repeating simple words like 'problems' or 'work' by using synonyms or more descriptive language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'this can effects on', and run-on sentences that lack proper punctuation. The range of sentence structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed compound sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and using punctuation to separate distinct ideas. Practicing complex sentence structures will also help improve your score.
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