Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
NOWDAYS PEOPLE ARE VERY BUSY IN THEIR LIFES BECAUSE OF THEIR JOBS ,STUDIES AND SOME OTHER REASONS AND THEY DID NOT INVOLVE IN PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES WHICH LEADS SO MANY HEALTH PROBLES SUCH AS OBESITY,HEART PROBLEMS AND SO ON. I WILL DISCUSS MY VIEWS AND SOME SOLUTIONS IN UPCOMING PARAGRAPS.
THERE ARE NUMEROUS REASONS WHY INDIVDUALS ARE NOT SPENDING THEIR TIMES IN ENGSGING EXERCISES. FIRSTLY, IN THIS MATERALISTIC ERA ,MOST OF PEOPLE ARE DOING FULL TIME JOBS AND IN THEIR HECTIC SCHEDULE THEY DID NOT GET ENOUGH TIME TO DO PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES .THE REASON IS THEY GET TIRED WHEN THEY CAME BACK HOMR AFTER WORKING LONG HOURS. SECONDLY, BECAUSE OF INTERNET ,MOBILE PHONES,VIDEO GAMES THEY PREFER TO SIT INFRONT OF TV SCREENS ,PLAYING ONLINE GAMES IN ORDER TO RELEIVE THEIR STRESS.LAST BUT NOT THE LEAST. PEOPLE HAVE SEDATORY LIFESTYLE BECAUSE OF SITTING JOBS AND INTERNET PEOPLE PREFER TO DO WORK FROM HOME. AS A RESULT, THEY HAVE HEALTH ISSUES SUCH AS OBESITY,HIGH CHOLESTROL, FATTY LIVER AND KNEE PROBLEMS.
IN ORDER TO RESOLVE HEALTH PROBLEMS AND TO GET PEOPLE INVOLVED IN PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES PEOPLE HAVE TO MAINTAIN A BALANCE BETWEEN THEIR HEALTH AND THEIR WORK SCHEDULE.BECAUSE HEALTH IS WEALTH SO SPEND SOME TIME TO DO SOME PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES LIKE MEDITATION,YOGA ,WALKING. MOREOVER, COMPANIES NEED TO ORGANISE SOME SEMINARS TO PROMOTE HEALTHY LIFESTYLE AMONG THEIR EMPLOYEES. PEOPLE NEED TO SET SCREEN TIMES BEACUSE IT ALSO HAVE BAD IMPACT ON YOUR VISION.
IN CONCLUSION, PEOPLE NEED TO MAINATIN A BALANCE IN THEIR LIVES TO PROMOTE HEALTHY LIFE STYLE BECAUSE GOOD HEALTH IS VERY CRITICAL TO ACHEIVE YOUR FUTURE GOALS AND ALWAYS REMBER HEALTH IS WEALTH.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the lack of exercise and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as the impact of sedentary jobs and the role of technology. However, the development is somewhat superficial. For instance, the suggestion to 'maintain a balance' is a bit vague and could be supported with more concrete examples of how individuals or companies can practically implement these changes. The position is clear throughout, but the overall depth of the argument is limited, which prevents it from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for reasons and solutions, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical. There is a clear progression of ideas, but the flow is occasionally hindered by repetitive sentence structures and minor punctuation errors. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the central topic of each paragraph is generally easy to follow, despite the lack of sophisticated linking phrases.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'NOWDAYS', 'LIFES', 'PROBLES', 'INDIVDUALS', 'ENGSGING', 'MATERALISTIC', 'SEDATORY', 'CHOLESTROL', 'BEACUSE', and 'MAINATIN'. These errors are frequent and occasionally distracting. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'sedentary lifestyle' and 'physical activities', the overall range is limited. To improve, the student should focus on accurate spelling and incorporating more academic collocations rather than relying on basic, repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are some attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'they did not involve in physical activities' (should be 'they do not engage in') and 'it also have bad impact' (should be 'it also has a bad impact'). Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are problematic throughout the text. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding spacing after commas and periods. The frequent errors, combined with the limited range of structures, indicate a need for significant improvement in grammatical control.
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