Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is undeniable that exercise helps human to be fit and healthy in their life. Nowadays, people are very busy with their busy schedules. There are many causes of the health issues which should be explained in the following paragraphs with the possible solution.

The main cause is not or doing less exercise is a hectic schedule. After working long hours daily, individuals get tired. So, they like to do the rest instead of doing excercise in the evening or like to spend time with the family while chatting or talking. Another reason of it is smartphones and social apps like Instagram, Facebook and Tik-Tok etc. Everyone scrolls reels at least one or two hours daily on their phone because they are habitual of it. As a result people sleep late at night then wake up late and do not get enough time for exercise. Although, nowadays, all wants to be rich, that’s why they do extra hours or extra jobs and they do not have time for exercises.

Education about exercise is the main solution of this problem. Local authorities should do events to aware them how exercise helps to be healthy and avoid health-related problems like obesity, joint pain, blockage of blood circulation and many more. Every city council should encourage youngsters for using phones in limit and encourage them for enough time for physical activities. So they are completing their own work. For example, if they are watching TV or using daily, then they will on sleep at night. People should spend time with family and for exercise too.

In conclusion, awareness and scheduling time accordingly are the main keys of this issue. Therefore, government should take some steps to spread awareness about physical activity in all cities and towns and youngsters also should support to manage their time for exercise to stay active and healthy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for lack of exercise and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as hectic work schedules and the distraction of social media. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For instance, the suggestion that local authorities should 'do events' is vague and lacks specific detail or examples of how such initiatives would realistically change behavior. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your arguments with more depth and provide more concrete, illustrative examples rather than listing general ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic progression of ideas from causes to solutions. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'So' and 'Therefore'. Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'So they are completing their own work,' which does not clearly connect to the previous point about youngsters using phones. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the message to be conveyed clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'hectic schedule' and 'health-related problems'. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'do the rest' instead of 'rest' or 'do events to aware them' instead of 'raise awareness'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on common words. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the' missing before 'exercise'), subject-verb agreement ('all wants to be rich'), and word forms ('using phones in limit'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors that occasionally interrupt the flow. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and attempt to use a wider variety of complex structures with greater precision.

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