Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays due to hectic schedule most of the individuals are unable to manage their time and not giving preference to exercise which leads to health issues. The first reason could be they give priority to other things such as work and spend most of their time at workplace and not take their health as a serious concern. To mitigate it, governmnet should take step and ristricted working hours so that individuals get time to focus on themselves.

To commence with, in this competitive era people are racing with each other to become successful in life. For that, they do work for nine to ten hours in an office and forget about their health which leads to serious health issues such as insomnia and obesity. The second cause could be laziness or not willing to do exercise because they prefer to spend time on social media rather then going to gym and playing outside. For example, in developing countries such as India where youth are get distracted by social media spend more time on social media apps as compare to do exercise in gym and open area. As a result, this leads to serious health issues.

To overcome this problem government should take initiative and help individuals to focus on their health as well. For Intance, authotities should ristrict working hour to seven or eight per day so that people can get time to do other activities such as running, walking and go to gym. Moreover, law makers should banned on certain type social media apps which are distracting the youth, For example, betting apps are serious concern because most of the people use these apps to make money and spend most of their time on them and forget about their physical health. Thus, by improving all causes which rise to health issues should be mitigate by govenment.

In Conclusion, to eradicate this issue individuals should give preference to physical health as they are giving to work life and government should also take initiate to overcome these problems by ristricting working hours and put limitations on social media apps.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task, examining both the reasons why working people do not get enough exercise and suggesting solutions. The student provides relevant ideas, such as long working hours, workplace stress, and the distraction of social media, and supports them with examples like office culture and youth in India. However, some ideas are slightly repetitive, and the solutions, such as banning certain social media apps, border on unrealistic, which reflects a Band 6 level of development. The position is clear throughout, but the depth of extension is limited in places.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement and logical paragraphing, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To commence with', 'For example', and 'In Conclusion', though some transitions are mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'To mitigate it, governmnet should take step'). Referencing is generally clear, but the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and repetition. Paragraphing is used sufficiently, placing each main idea in its own paragraph, fitting the Band 6 descriptor well.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'insomnia', 'obesity', and 'competitive era'. However, there are numerous word choice, spelling, and morphological errors throughout the text, including 'governmnet' instead of government, 'ristricted' instead of restricted, 'then' instead of than, and 'authotities' instead of authorities. These errors do not impede overall communication, but they restrict the lexical score to Band 5.5, showing a mix of adequate vocabulary alongside noticeable inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and conditional structures. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and preposition use, such as 'most of the individuals are unable', 'youth are get distracted', and 'working hour to seven or eight per day'. Punctuation is also erratic in places. Because the frequency of errors is high and affects basic sentence patterns, the grammar performance aligns closely with a Band 5 descriptor.

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