Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is undeniable to say that majority of people give less preference to indulge in physical activities because they are busy in their jobs as of it leads to some serious health problems. I will explore what are the possible reasons as well as suggest some attractive solutions to tackle with this trend.
To begin with, in this contemporary era, compettion is rocketing day by day in each and every field due to this people work with diligently or evn though they work for extra hours to fulfill their needs. Second, people become more lazy because of hectic schedule as a result, they felt tired after the long day shift, automatically, less motivation toward exercise. Moreover, due to advancement in tecnology, such as, cell phones, computers so they prefer to use those gadget rather then exercise.
On the other hand, there are some actions that can help to resolve this issue. Firstly, companies should organise some sport events once in a month to encourage their employee to take part in these activities. After that, eveyone should make a proper timetable according to their daily routine, also they set a time limit for browsing the internet. Government should support the local people by organising free yoga calsses or they should bulid new parks and comunnity centers to promote healthy lifestyle.
To cap it all, it is conclude that it is everyone's their own responsibility to do exercise along with their busy schedule
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
Your response addresses all parts of the prompt by identifying reasons why working people lack exercise, such as high competition, fatigue, and technology, and offers viable solutions like company sports events and government-funded yoga classes. However, your essay is only 241 words long, which fails to meet the minimum requirement of 250 words. As a direct result of this under-length penalty, your Task Achievement score is limited. Additionally, some ideas such as the mention of technology lack full development and concrete examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
Your essay has a clear overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs covering reasons and solutions, and a brief conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Second', and 'On the other hand' to signal progression. However, paragraphing and referencing are sometimes awkward, and the conclusion is incomplete and abrupt, ending mid-sentence ('everyone's their own responsibility to do exercise along with their busy schedule'). Cohesion is mechanical in places, placing this response securely at Band 6.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common phrases such as 'contemporary era', 'rocketing day by day', and 'healthy lifestyle'. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'majority of people' (missing article), 'compettion' (spelling), 'evn though' (spelling), 'tecnology' (spelling), 'calsses' (spelling), and 'bulid' (spelling). These errors do not completely impede communication, but they restrict your lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'It is undeniable to say that majority of people give less preference to indulge...' and 'Government should support the local people by organising free yoga calsses or they should bulid new parks...'. However, your writing contains frequent grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('majority of people'), incorrect prepositions ('tackle with'), and awkward phrasing ('as of it leads to'). Punctuation is also problematic, leading to run-on sentences. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.
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