Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemporary era, exercise have been playing vital role in everyone's life. So many individuals, who are having job, they have been spending less hours for fitness or some are not doing anything for become physically fit while working day or free time, evantually they can have health issues.

To commence, there are plathora of the reason behind this scenario. First of all, many people have been working for 10 to 12 hours of shifts, due to that, they do not have time to do exercise. In addition to that, some of individuals have heavy physical work during the daytime; construction, plumbering, welding etc, because of those type of work they do not have enegy to do somthing for their physical health. Also, many individuals have other responsibilities regarding thair friends and family, though, they can not do some activities which is helpful for their physical fitness. For an example, One study of Oxford university found that, 75% of working people spending their free time with their friends and family, as, it gives them joy.

There are various way to overcome this issue. Firstly, by spreading awareness about health concerns- Government ought to aware each individuals about health problems such as, blood pressure, diabetes, dementia and many more, therefore, everyone should do some physical activities at least 5 days per week, which assists them to be fit and. Apart from that, companies needs to arrange half hour to 45 minutes in the morning, for some exercise, it is beneficial for both: employees and organisation. For example, Apple company (one of prominant brands of electronic gadgets) have rule that, everyone must give their 45 minutes for fitness in the morning, because of that, workers have started get new ideas and organisation is getting profit.

In conclusion, I reckon that, Everyone must spend at least 1 hour a day for do so

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by explaining why working people lack exercise and suggesting practical solutions. The candidate covers reasons such as long working hours, physically demanding jobs, and social responsibilities. Solutions are also provided, including government awareness campaigns and corporate wellness initiatives like mandated exercise time. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed or contain sweeping generalizations, and the conclusion is extremely abrupt and unfinished. Despite these minor limitations, the main prompt questions are sufficiently answered, corresponding well to the Band 6 descriptor where all parts are addressed with relevant ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a logical overall progression with basic paragraphing. The candidate attempts to use transitional markers such as 'To commence', 'First of all', and 'In conclusion' to signal structure. However, referencing and cohesion are occasionally faulty or mechanical, such as the redundant phrasing 'some of individuals have heavy physical work'. Paragraphing is present, but the abrupt ending lacks a fully formed concluding sentence. The flow is maintained well enough for the reader to follow the argument without significant confusion, placing it comfortably at Band 6.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, though it contains notable errors in word choice and spelling ('evantually', 'plathora', 'plumbering', 'enegy', 'prominant'). The student attempts less common vocabulary ('contemporary era', 'wellness', 'corporate'), but these attempts frequently show inaccuracies in collocation and form. While the meaning is generally clear despite these lexical flaws, the frequent spelling slips and unnatural phrasing restrict the score to a Band 5.5, reflecting a mix of minimally adequate range and noticeable vocabulary errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and conditional structures. However, frequent grammatical errors occur throughout the text, such as tense and agreement issues ('exercise have been playing', 'So many individuals, who are having job, they have been spending'), missing prepositions, and awkward punctuation. While these errors rarely completely impede communication, their high frequency across most complex structures prevents the writing from achieving a Band 6, placing it firmly at Band 5.

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