Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.
Why do many working people not get enough exercise?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In today's generation, excercise is most vital part of everyone's life than old days because of increasing level of ouside earting and rely on prepared or frozen food. And because of busy work life, most people unable to manage and allocate time for excercise everyday. Therefore, this situation risen number of health related issues in recent yeasrs.
Although, in this social media's era, number of people started living healthy life, maintain their body, mostly to show their best side to the world, but you will definitely see vast number of people, who doesn't really care about social media's attention or their health. These group involves in
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by discussing why working people lack exercise and mentioning health issues, but the response is severely incomplete due to breaking off mid-sentence ('These group involves in'). Furthermore, the word count is only 106 words, which falls drastically short of the required 250-word minimum. Because the response is unfinished and lacks the necessary length to develop ideas fully, it can only be awarded a Band 4.0 for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text begins with some simple cohesive devices such as 'Therefore' and 'Although'. However, because the text cuts off abruptly in the second paragraph, logical progression and paragraphing cannot be properly evaluated beyond the opening thoughts. There is a lack of overall cohesive structure. The mechanical layout is disrupted by the incomplete ending, aligning the coherence with a Band 4.0 level.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and contains several spelling and collocation errors, such as 'excercise' (exercise), 'ouside earting' (outside eating), 'earting', and 'yeasrs' (years). There are attempts at less common topics like 'health related issues' and 'social media's era', but the high frequency of spelling mistakes and awkward phrasing heavily restricts the lexical score. Therefore, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as in the opening sentence ('In today's generation, excercise is most vital part...'). However, grammatical accuracy is poor, with frequent errors including missing articles ('is most vital part'), subject-verb agreement issues ('most people unable', 'this situation risen'), and incomplete clauses. The text ends abruptly mid-sentence, leaving structural control severely compromised. This corresponds to a Band 4.0.
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