Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Everyone has a busy schedules so they do not get enough time for exercise during work and even in their free time. Therefore, have many health issues.

Many workers do not get enough exercise because of tiredness and sedentary lifestyle. In modern days , everyone is busy with their job or study. In foreign countries, young boys and girls are doing work at late night shifts for 12 hours and so on. After that, they get fatigue. As a result, they do not have time for themselves such as for doing gym, yoga or pilates. On the other side, many people have sitting jobs, they are sitting for long hours in the chair. In this way, individuals adapt themselves in this enviornment.

People can resolve this issue by time management. firstly, health should be number one priority for everyone. Because it is important for well-being. Any individual should get enough time for his health. If anyone get a chance for workshop or free yoga classes. Participate in these activities. Nowadays many influencers or nutritionist offer online tutorials for weight loss journey. Anyone can join them, they provide exercises as well as diet also. If people do not immerse themselves into physical activities including swimming, walking, wrestling. They can suffer from many health problems cardiovascular, respiratory and circulatory diseases.

In conclusion, health is very crucial for all of us. If people reschedule their time table, in this way they get enough time for their physical health and for mental health also. Therefore, we can get rid of various diseases and can enjoy our lives

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you identify tiredness and long periods of sitting as reasons, then suggest prioritising health, managing time and joining exercise activities. These ideas are relevant, and the examples of late shifts and desk-based work help explain the causes. However, some points are asserted rather than developed. For instance, the reference to “foreign countries” and young people working night shifts is broad and not clearly connected to working people generally. The proposed solutions also need more explanation: clarify how employers, for example, could make exercise easier during the working day, rather than relying mainly on individuals to find time or join online programmes. This would make the response more fully supported and balanced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions and a conclusion. This gives the reader a clear overall route through the answer. Some links between ideas are effective, such as “As a result” connecting long shifts with fatigue. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes uneven, and several transitions feel mechanical or unclear. “On the other side” does not accurately introduce the contrasting cause of sedentary work, while “If anyone get a chance… Participate in these activities” breaks the flow between sentences. Group related solutions together and use clearer links to show whether an idea is an example, result or contrast. This would make the organisation smoother and the relationships between points easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “sedentary lifestyle,” “late night shifts,” “physical activities” and names of exercise types. This gives you enough range to discuss causes and possible responses. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, which makes parts of the message less natural: “they get fatigue,” “adapt themselves in this environment,” and “provide exercises as well as diet also.” There are also spelling and form errors, such as “enviornment” and “nutritionist” where the plural is intended. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling and word forms. More precise expressions for workplace activity and health consequences would help you communicate your ideas more clearly and flexibly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including cause-and-effect clauses such as “After that, they get fatigue. As a result…” and a conditional structure beginning “If people do not immerse themselves…”. However, errors in agreement, sentence formation and punctuation are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “Everyone has a busy schedules” has an agreement error, and “Therefore, have many health issues” is an incomplete sentence. The conditional sentence about physical activities is also unfinished and does not connect grammatically to the consequence that follows. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and punctuation. This will make your varied structures more controlled and easier to understand.

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