Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This is true that in this era people can not get enough time to do physical excercise during their working life as their result they face many health issues. It happen due to various reasons and it can be solve it in upcoming paragrapghs.

To begin it, there are many reasons why people can not get time to to work on their physical body. Firstly, in this modern era individuals are not schedule their work life balance properly. They work more hours to get more money and leave behind their health. They might got tired from their work so can not manage time to do exercise. Secondly, some people live more sedentary lifestyle. People are used to do work that needs physical strength they lift weights nevertheless nowdays people even cannot take a single step or lift regular weight in whole day this might can start the problem of obesity or muscle lose.

However, it can be solved if people impliment some solution in their daily life. To take an example, while working they can take a shot break for do some pushup or go for a little walk this can not only help them in their physical movement as well as they get fresh mind while walking. Along with this they can solve if they reschedule their whole day they can avoid or remove unnessery tasks such as reduce one or half hour in their sleep this little change might can help them make their life more healthy.

To conclude, people can not get time due to their busy schedule or their laziness but, it can can be solved by rescheduling their daily tasks or by little short breaks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you identify long working hours, tiredness, and sedentary routines as reasons, then suggest short activity breaks and reorganising the day. These points are relevant, and the examples of walking or doing push-ups make the proposed actions more concrete. However, the explanation remains general and some ideas are unclear or insufficiently developed. For instance, the claim that people can make time by reducing sleep is not well justified and may suggest an unhealthy solution. The conclusion also introduces “laziness,” which was not explained in the essay. To strengthen the response, explain how workplace demands or personal routines restrict exercise, and develop practical solutions such as employer-provided breaks or active commuting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “However” help readers follow the main stages. However, some links are mechanical or do not clearly express the relationship between ideas. For example, “To begin it” is an awkward opening, and “Along with this they can solve if…” leaves the connection between the solution and the problem unclear. The conclusion repeats earlier points rather than bringing them together, and the final sentence is difficult to follow. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each explanation directly to its example or consequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “sedentary lifestyle,” “obesity,” “physical movement,” and “reschedule.” This gives you a basic range for discussing causes and solutions. However, word choice, collocation, and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning harder to understand. Examples include “work on their physical body,” “shot break,” “unnessery tasks,” and “muscle lose.” Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “people are not schedule their work life balance properly.” Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “maintain a healthy work-life balance” and “take a short break” would make your ideas clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using clauses to explain causes and results, as in “They might got tired from their work so can not manage time to do exercise.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “It happen due to various reasons” needs a correctly formed verb, while “individuals are not schedule” has an incorrect verb pattern. The sentence beginning “To take an example” also combines several ideas without a clear grammatical structure. Practise accurate present-tense forms and build longer sentences around one clear main clause, checking that each clause has a subject and correctly formed verb.

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