Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern world, majority of individuals are surrounded by busy life syle, therefore they can not spend enough time for their body to stay fit, consequently, they are facing related problems. This situation creates several challenges for such as health and obesity, but there are also effective measures.

One of the major problem caused by busy life style and workload. In this growing world, although everyone want to live luxary life and have lot of money, they need to do hardwork and passionate about dream but they might be pushed by burden of responsibilities. For example, a person have busy schedule like 10 hours shift as well as he has a resposibility of family, as a result not enough time of exercise to maintain body. In addition, people are becoming very lazy day by day and they are westing time on social media and many unneccesary activities wchich may be disturb their daily life.

To solve this raising concern, first of all we should make proper time table for our daily activities including physical movement of your body. For instance, you should join gym for exercise and avoid transportatio for outside activity , prefere walking and running as well as cycle. Moreover, start to wake up early at the morning as much as possible convenient for you and you can use some apps which can guide you to achive your daily exercise goal.

In conclusion, busy life style is major obstcle to follow stable time table like exercise, However, these issues can be addressed by effective schedule and some health guide apps.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: the first body paragraph gives workload and family responsibilities as reasons, while the second proposes scheduling exercise, walking or cycling, and using apps. These are relevant responses, and the examples of a ten-hour shift and family duties help illustrate the causes. However, the explanation of social-media use is brief, and the solutions are mostly listed rather than explained—for example, it is not clear how employers or communities could help people with demanding schedules. The introduction also refers to health and obesity without developing these effects. To strengthen the response, explain the most important causes and show more clearly how each proposed measure would make regular exercise practical.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for causes and solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “For example,” “In addition,” and “To solve this” help readers follow the main stages, and the central focus remains understandable. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the clearer progression associated with a stronger performance. However, connections are sometimes mechanical, and the first sentence of the causes paragraph (“One of the major problem caused by busy life style and workload”) is incomplete, so the relationship between the introduction and the paragraph is unclear. Some ideas also run together in long sentences. Use complete topic sentences and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “workload,” “burden of responsibilities,” “physical movement,” and “daily exercise goal.” There are also attempts to use less common expressions, such as “luxary life,” although inaccurate spelling and phrasing reduce their effectiveness. The range is limited in places, with repeated use of “busy life style,” “exercise,” and general terms such as “activities.” Several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors—“resposibility,” “westing,” “raising concern,” and “health guide apps”—may make the reader pause or infer your intended meaning. Build a more accurate range of collocations for causes and solutions, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast clause beginning “although” and cause-and-effect links using “as a result.” However, control is inconsistent, and several sentences contain errors that can make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “One of the major problem caused by busy life style and workload” lacks a complete verb, while “everyone want” and “a person have” show subject–verb agreement problems. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in “In this modern world, majority of individuals” and “as much as possible convenient for you.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation. More accurate control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to understand.

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