Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people didn't get little or no exercise either during working day or in their free time because now everyone is busy in his life to earn money. Now people think only earning good money is enough. They are less motivated towords exercise. Due to the little exercise they have developed health problems. Some are having heart problem while some are obese and have fatty liver issue all these disease are due to no exercise in their daily routine.

I shared my example of my life when i totally do my work for continuously 8 hours and then eat the junk food and sleep without doing exersice. After one month, I start gaining weight and at the end of two months. I gained 7 kg weight. Then one day all the friends maked a plan to went on hike in Islamabad. I was ready too. When I start hiking I didn't even continue my track for two kilometers.The track is about five km long so hard for me to cover. All my friends enjoyed a lot and I was sitting alone waiting for them to come back. I shamed of myself that I can't even walk for 5 km.After that I started doing regular exercise and control my weight. Now if I am busy or not I spend 20 minutes for my daily exercise. Now I am getting healthy day by day and also council other to start doing exercise for healthy lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you identify busy work schedules, prioritising income, and low motivation as reasons, then describe how regular exercise helped you. The hiking story is relevant and gives a concrete example of the consequences of inactivity. However, the response focuses much more on your personal experience than on explaining the problem generally or setting out what can be done. The proposed solution—spending 20 minutes exercising and encouraging others—is only briefly stated, with little discussion of how workplaces or individuals could make exercise easier. The response is also 7 words below the required minimum. Develop both causes and practical solutions more fully, using the example to support rather than replace that discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a recognisable sequence: you introduce reasons, recount your experience, and explain the change you made. Time markers such as “After one month,” “Then one day,” and “After that” help the reader follow the story. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the shift from general causes to the personal example and then to solutions is not clearly signposted. Some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “all these disease are due to no exercise,” and several ideas run together without effective punctuation. Use separate paragraphs for causes, solutions, and your example, and connect them with clear transitions such as “One practical measure” or “This experience illustrates.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “motivated,” “health problems,” “obese,” “hiking,” and “regular exercise,” and the personal account is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning less natural: “fatty liver issue,” “maked a plan,” and “council other” do not express the intended ideas appropriately. Spelling errors such as “exersice” and “toWords” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of precise phrases for causes and solutions, and check spelling and word forms. For example, use “encourage others” rather than “council other,” and “organised a hike” rather than “maked a plan to went on hike.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to describe events in the past and present, and you include some longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors occur in verb forms and tense, as in “I start gaining weight,” “maked a plan,” and “to went on hike.” There are also problems with sentence boundaries and clause structure: “After one month, I start gaining weight and at the end of two months. I gained 7 kg weight” is broken into an incomplete sentence, while “I shamed of myself” lacks a required verb. Articles, agreement, and punctuation also need attention. Practise accurate past-tense narration and build longer sentences from correctly joined clauses; for instance, “I felt ashamed because I could not walk five kilometres.”

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