Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.

Why do many working people not get enough exercise?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this morden era, plenty of individuals being laizy and tired due to their workload, so people do not have time to do a exercise otherwise they are spending less time on it on their working day and also their free time. In this essay we will discuss a reason behind this and what are the health problem causes.

On a one hand, there are various causes will be there not to do exercise or not to do enough exercise. Mainly peole are busy in their life and they are working harder to earn more money. So, they can live a better life. Due to more workload , they do not have a enough time for walking or to go a gym. However, in their free time thay have another household chores. Thus, they are totally engagged in them, and after doing this they have little time in that they are feeling tired. As a result, for enjoyment they will go out with family and friends.

Nowadays, this situations are going to be critical.To begin, person has to be aware regarding their lifestyle and health. They have to take care of themselves by going a gym, doing excercise at home, also by walking. People have to set a goal that they must go for walk daily and complete a ten thousand steps. Such example company should arrange a monthly merathon, sports activities. Ultimately, it will lead a person body active and fit also well bing would feel more relax physically and mentally as well.

In conclusion, doa e xcercise and keep your body healthy and active. However person is a busy in their hectic lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: the first body paragraph gives reasons such as heavy workloads and household chores, while the next suggests walking, home exercise, and workplace sports events. These are relevant ideas, but they are mostly listed rather than explained or supported with a specific example. The opening also promises to discuss “health problem causes,” which does not match the task’s focus on why people exercise too little and what can be done. Your position is not consistently clear, and the conclusion (“doa e xcercise and keep your body healthy and active”) is difficult to understand and does not clearly summarise the proposed solutions. Develop fewer points with clearer explanations and finish with a direct summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the ideas are generally grouped by causes and solutions. Connectors such as “As a result,” “To begin,” and “In conclusion” help signal stages of the response. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the move from being tired to going out with family and friends is not fully explained, and the solutions paragraph shifts from personal habits to company activities without a clear link. Some transitions, including “On a one hand” and “Such example,” are inaccurate or awkward, while “However” does not clearly express a contrast in its sentence. Use simpler, accurate linking phrases and make each sentence’s relationship to the previous idea explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “workload,” “household chores,” “lifestyle,” “sports activities,” and “physically and mentally.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main subject, but the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to interpret. Examples include “morden,” “laizy,” “peole,” “engagged,” and “merathon”; “do a exercise” and “well bing” are also inaccurate expressions. Some phrases, such as “a person body active and fit,” do not convey the intended meaning naturally. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for exercise and health, such as “make time for exercise” and “stay physically active.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using clauses with “so,” “due to,” and “after,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently. For example, “plenty of individuals being laizy and tired” lacks a correctly formed main verb, and “there are various causes will be there” combines incompatible structures. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent in “a enough time” and “this situations,” while “company should arrange” needs a determiner or plural subject. Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention, particularly in “critical.To begin.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking verb forms, articles, and subject–verb agreement.

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