Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrate the years between 1920 and 2019 the changes in ownership of electrical items and price of time spent doing housework in households in one country.

Overall, in this chart they demonstrate the percentage of households with electrical appliances ([redacted phone]).They fully explain the percentage of households items such as Washing machine,Refrigerator and vacuum cleaner.They also display the number of hours of housework per week, per house hold ([redacted phone]).

Firstly,they show the percentage the number of house that that people use in different years.To begin with,,in 1920 the use of washing machine was about 40% and 60% in 1940 after that in 1960 the use of washing machine was 70% in 1980 the percentage decrease from 70 and stop at 65% in 2000 the percentage increase from 65 to 70% and at last in 2019 the percentage stop on 75%.Refrigerator was 0% in 1920 they increase in 1940 and stop on 90% after that in 1960,1980,2000 and 2019 the percentage was remain same on 100%.Last item is vacuum it was start from 30% in 1920 and 60% in 1940,70% in 1960,905 in 1980 and 100% was remain same in [redacted phone].

Eventually, in 1920 number of hours was 50 on a per household,35 hours per week in 1940 and 20 hours used in 1960 on a per week after that in [redacted phone] the number of hours remain same on 15 in a one week and ultimately in 2019 the number of hours decrease and stuck on 10 hours per week for per household.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify the broad pattern that appliance ownership generally rose while weekly housework hours fell. Several figures are reported accurately, including washing-machine ownership and the decline in housework from 50 to about 11 hours. However, the overview mainly describes what the charts contain rather than summarising their key trends. There are also important data errors: refrigerators reached about 55% in 1940 and 90% in 1960, not 90% in 1940 followed by 100% from 1960; vacuum-cleaner ownership was about 50% in 1940, not 60%. The final housework figure is approximately 11, rather than 10. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the contrasting trends and check each comparison against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a general paragraph, a paragraph on appliance ownership and a final paragraph on housework. This helps the reader distinguish the two charts, and time markers such as “in 1920” and “ultimately in 2019” provide some sequencing. However, progression within the appliance paragraph is difficult to follow because several figures and years are crowded into long sentences, with little punctuation. Connectors such as “Firstly,” “To begin with,” and “Eventually” are repetitive or do not clearly signal the relationship between points. The overview also repeats the chart contents instead of guiding the reader through the main comparisons. Use shorter, clearly punctuated comparisons and organise the appliance trends together before contrasting them with housework.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “ownership,” “percentage,” “appliances,” and “hours of housework,” so the subject is generally clear. However, the range of trend language is limited, and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural: “price of time spent,” “the percentage stop on,” and “remain same on” do not describe the data clearly. Repeated use of “use” and “percentage” also makes the account less precise. Some word-form and spelling issues, such as “house hold” and “905” for 90%, further reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate verbs and collocations for describing change, such as “rose to,” “fell slightly,” “levelled off,” and “accounted for,” and check that each phrase fits the figure being described.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect events across time, for example in “after that in 1960” and “in 1980-2000,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and longer sentences are often difficult to control. Errors in tense, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries occur frequently: “The graph illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “the percentage was remain same” combines incompatible verb forms. Missing full stops and commas also make the appliance section hard to parse. These problems sometimes obscure the intended comparisons, even though the reader can usually identify the general meaning. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and simple comparative structures first, then combine ideas using clauses such as “while” or “whereas,” with clear punctuation.

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