Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graphs illustrates the percentage of houses that contain some electrical appliances and the number of hours spent in housework per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, the proportion of owening washing machines, refrigerators and vaccum cleaner increased significantly during the given period of time. While the number of housework descreased dram

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the two subjects of the charts and attempts an overview, noting that appliance ownership rose while housework time fell. However, it stops before reporting any specific figures or comparisons, so the main features are not adequately summarised. The overview is also incomplete: it does not mention that refrigerators and vacuum cleaners reached full household ownership, or that washing-machine ownership dipped slightly before rising again. The final phrase, “descreased dram…”, is unfinished and leaves the trend unclear. The response contains 56 words, below the required 150, which contributes to the very limited coverage. To improve, complete the summary and select key figures from the start, middle and end of the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces both graphs, followed by a separate overview beginning “Overall”. This gives the reader a recognisable starting structure. However, the response ends abruptly during the overview, so there is no developed progression, supporting detail or concluding comparison. The contrast marker “While” signals a relationship between appliance ownership and housework time, but the clause is left unfinished, preventing the connection from being understood. Use a complete overview paragraph, then organise the main details into logical groups—for example, appliance ownership in one paragraph and housework hours in another—with clear links between the periods and trends.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage”, “electrical appliances”, “proportion” and “per week”, so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is very limited because the response ends before it can describe changes or make comparisons. Several spelling errors—“owening”, “vaccum” and “descreased”—reduce accuracy, and “houses that contain” is less natural than a phrase such as “households owning” appliances. The unfinished “dram” also leaves the intended description incomplete. Build a wider set of accurate trend expressions, such as “rose steadily”, “levelled off”, “reached 100%” and “fell from 50 to 11 hours”, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The opening sentence is a complete attempt to describe both charts, and the overview begins with a clear introductory marker. However, grammatical control is uneven: “The line graphs illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “the number of housework descreased” does not form a correct grammatical pattern. The final sentence is cut off after “dram”, leaving the clause incomplete. The response shows little range beyond basic sentence forms, and the unfinished text makes it difficult to assess control across a fuller response. Practise accurate agreement and complete comparative clauses, for example: “The graphs illustrate…” and “The number of hours spent on housework decreased dramatically.” Ensure every sentence is complete.

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