Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given graph tell us the change in ownership of electrical machines and rate of time spent doing housework in households between 1920 and 2019 in one country

Firstly we discused about washing machine in1920 40% pepole were owner of washing machine in 1940 it increase and reached to the 60% in 1960 its again increase and reached to 70% then its come down in 1980 and again reached to 60% in 2000 in 2019 it increase almost to 60%

second we discused the refrigerator . Refrigerator increased gradualy between 1920 to 1980 and its percentage ownership increase from 30% to 90% it again increased in 2000 and reached to 100% and 2019 it remain same

third we discused vacuum cleaner its had high increase in 1940 and increased fron 0%to 50% in 1960 its reached to 90% in 1980 its reached to 100% and remain same till 2019

rate of hour per weak decrease in diff rate in 1920 it was 50% in 1940 it was

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the general subject and report several broad trends, including the rise in refrigerator ownership and the decline in housework time. However, the response only minimally covers the task because it has no clear overview and gives incomplete or inaccurate figures. For example, refrigerator ownership starts at about 2%, not 30%, and reaches 100% by 1980; the 30% starting figure belongs to vacuum cleaners. Washing-machine ownership rises to about 75% by 2019, rather than ending at 60%. The housework description stops after stating the 1940 figure, so its later decline is not reported. To improve, give a concise overview of the main patterns, then select accurate comparisons across the period for all four series.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some basic organisation: it moves through washing machines, refrigerators, vacuum cleaners and housework, using sequence markers such as “Firstly,” “second” and “third.” This makes the topic of each section partly identifiable. However, there is no clear overall progression from an overview to supporting details, and the final discussion is cut off after “in 1940 it was,” leaving the account unfinished. The repeated “we discussed” framing is mechanical and does not help connect comparisons. Grouping the appliance trends together and then describing housework, with a separate opening overview, would make the information easier to follow. Use linking phrases to show contrasts and changes over time rather than relying mainly on numbered transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “ownership,” “increased,” “reached” and “remain same,” so the reader can recognise the general subject and direction of change. However, the vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and several word choices or forms make the account less clear, such as “electrical machines,” “rate of hour per weak” and “high increase.” Spelling errors, including “gradualy,” “fron” and “pepole,” are also noticeable. Aim for precise chart language and vary the verbs used to describe trends. For example, distinguish between a figure that “rose,” “fell,” “levelled off” or “remained stable,” and use “percentage of households” rather than unclear phrases such as “rate of time.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple clauses, with a few attempts to connect events using “and” and “then.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Examples include “The given graph tell us,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “in 1940 it increase,” where the past-tense form is needed. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly the long washing-machine account, and the final sentence is incomplete. Articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing. Practise writing complete past-tense sentences with one clear comparison in each, and use full stops to separate stages. A few accurate complex sentences using “while” or “whereas” would add range without sacrificing clarity.

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