Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts show information about the ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent on housework in households in one country brtween 1920 and 2019. According to the data, the percentage of households with electrical appliances has increased during this time. On the other hand, the number of hours of housework decreased significantly.

In 1920, the percentage of households with a refrigerator was 0%, while for the washing machine it was 40% and 30% was the percentage of households with a vacuum cleaner. So there was a significant difference at this time. In the same year, the number of hours spent on housework in every household was 50hrs per week, which is an important number. In 1940, the three percentages increased gradually, 50% for vaccum cleaner, 55% for refrigerator and 60% for washing machine, this increase lowered the number of hours of housework from 50hrs to 35hrs per week. Between 1940 and 1960, the percentage of households with a vacuum cleaner raised from 50% to 70%, and from 60% to 70% for the washing machine, meanwhile the percentage of households with a refrigerator rose dramatically and reached 90% in 1960. In the other hand, the number of hours of housework per week continued to fall dramatically.

In the next 20 years, the percentage of households with a washing machine decreased slightly from 70% to 63%. In the other opposite, the two percentages of households with the vaccum cleaner and the refrigerator continued going up.Between 1980 and 2019, and after a slight decrease the percentage of households with a washing machine incr

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the overall contrast—appliance ownership generally rose while housework hours fell—and report several relevant figures, including 50 hours in 1920, 35 in 1940 and the refrigerator’s 90% in 1960. However, the response only partially covers the data and its overview is broad rather than selective. The final section is cut off after “the percentage of households with a washing machine incr”, leaving the later trends and the endpoint figures unreported. Some details are inaccurate: refrigerator ownership was about 2%, not 0%, in 1920, and washing-machine ownership fell to about 65%, not 63%, in 1980. Develop a complete overview and report the key end-point trends, including appliances reaching saturation and housework falling to about 11 hours.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it begins with a general summary and then moves through periods from 1920 onward. This chronological approach helps the reader follow the broad changes. However, progression is weakened by repetitive, mechanical linking, such as “In the other hand,” “In the other opposite,” and repeated use of “In [year/period].” Some links are also unclear: “this increase lowered the number of hours” suggests a direct causal relationship that the chart does not establish. The final paragraph is incomplete, so the account does not reach a clear conclusion or finish its comparison. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped data, and connect trends neutrally—for example, “over the same period, housework hours also declined.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “ownership,” “percentage,” “decreased significantly,” and “rose dramatically,” so the main trends are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which fits this band. Examples include “the three percentages increased gradually” (the refrigerator rose sharply from about 2% to 55%), “raised from 50% to 70%,” and “the two percentages … continued going up.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “brtween” and “vaccum,” and “an important number” does not describe a chart figure precisely. Choose verbs that match the data and use concise reporting language, such as “ownership climbed,” “reached saturation,” and “housework hours fell.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including comparisons across years, but complex sentences are often poorly controlled and errors recur. For example, “In 1940, the three percentages increased gradually, 50% for vacuum cleaner…” joins a complete clause to a list without a clear grammatical structure. “In the next 20 years, the percentage … decreased … In the other opposite, the two percentages…” also contains an incomplete or awkwardly connected construction. Articles and number patterns are inconsistent in phrases such as “for vacuum cleaner” and “the two percentages of households with the vacuum cleaner and the refrigerator.” Punctuation is also missing after “going up.” Build shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses and consistent articles and punctuation.

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