Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, the ratio of refrigerator is very improve than the ratio of vacuum cleaner and the ratio of washing machine is low.

According to the graphs the graphs belo shows the ratio of washing machine is up in year 1960 and low the ratio in 1980 and next year same ratio in years up and down in all times. And the next ratio of refrigerator is very up in the years1920 to 2019. The last ratio is vacuum cleaner is same up in all years.

Therefore, the ratio of number of hours of housework per week, per household is low ratio in 1920 to 2019 every year down the ratio in all year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two broad patterns: appliance ownership generally rises, while weekly housework hours fall. However, the response reports almost no accurate figures or useful comparisons, and the overview is unclear: saying refrigerator ownership is “very improve” compared with the other appliances does not explain the main trends precisely. The washing-machine account is difficult to interpret, and “same up in all years” does not accurately describe the vacuum-cleaner trend. Include key data points—for example, refrigerators rise from about 2% to 100%, while housework falls from 50 to 11 hours—and describe the washing-machine dip around 1980. The response is also 33 words below the 150-word minimum; the 23 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. This limited coverage and development explain the minimal response to the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and separate discussion of appliance ownership and housework. This gives the reader some indication of how the response is organised. However, progression within the body is weak, and several links between ideas are unclear. For example, “According to the graphs the graphs belo” repeats the reference to the charts, while “And the next ratio” and “The last ratio” create a mechanical sequence rather than clear comparisons. The final paragraph begins “Therefore,” although it introduces another trend rather than a conclusion. Organise the body into clear comparisons, use accurate references to each appliance, and connect the figures with simple, purposeful linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “ownership,” “ratio,” “refrigerator,” “vacuum cleaner,” and “hours of housework.” These show awareness of the chart topic, but vocabulary is basic and repetitive, especially the repeated use of “ratio” and “up” or “low.” Some word choices and collocations make the intended meaning difficult to understand: “the ratio of refrigerator is very improve” and “same up in all years” are not natural ways to describe chart trends. Use precise trend language such as “the proportion of households owning refrigerators increased” and “vacuum-cleaner ownership rose steadily.” Check spelling as well, including “belo,” and avoid repeating the same general terms when more exact alternatives are available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt several sentence forms, including an overall statement and sentences describing changes over time. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the relationships between ideas hard to follow. The opening says “The charts below shows,” where the plural subject requires “show.” Other examples include “the ratio of refrigerator,” “is very improve,” and “the ratio of washing machine is up in year 1960,” which show problems with articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. The long sentence beginning “According to the graphs” also lacks clear structure and punctuation. Practise writing short, complete comparisons with accurate past-tense verbs, for example, “Refrigerator ownership rose from about 2% in 1920 to 100% in 1980.”

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