Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The two line graphs represent the changes in ownership of electrica; appliances in a household and number of hours spend on house work per week in 1920 to 2019.

Washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner are majorly used electric appliances in a households.

Vaccum cleaner and refrigerator have the highest percentage in terms of usage in a household and it increased throughout the year. In 1920, vaccum cleaner and refrigerator usage was around 30% and 0% but a rapid increased can be seen in 2019 with almost 100% utilization a household. Whereas, Washing machine is used less by householders as compared to other appliances. In 1920, washing machine was used around 30% but a litlle decreased could be seen in 1980. Later in 2019, th

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the two subjects and mentions several relevant trends, including the rise in refrigerator and vacuum-cleaner ownership and the slight fall in washing-machine ownership around 1980. However, it is incomplete: the final sentence breaks off at “Later in 2019, th”, and the hours-of-housework graph is not reported at all. Some figures are also inaccurate: refrigerator ownership was about 2% in 1920, not 0%, and washing-machine ownership was about 40%, not 30%. The overview is unclear and does not summarise the key contrast that appliance ownership generally rose while housework time fell. The response is also 25 words below the required minimum. To improve, complete the comparison, cover both graphs, and select accurate key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence from an introduction to a short discussion of appliance ownership, and linking expressions such as “Whereas” and “Later” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the response has no clear overall progression: it moves directly into appliance details without a distinct overview, and the second graph is omitted. The final sentence is unfinished, which leaves the discussion without a conclusion or completed comparison. Some references are also unclear, such as “it increased throughout the year,” where “it” could refer to either appliance. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and focused detail paragraphs, using clear references and completing each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “ownership,” “percentage,” “usage,” and “increased,” so the reader can identify the general subject. There is also an attempt to vary wording with “rapid” and “utilization.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “majorly used electric appliances,” “usage … increased,” and “a rapid increased.” Spelling errors in “electrica;,” “Vaccum,” and “litlle” also reduce control, while “house work” is better written as one word. Aim for precise chart language and natural collocations: describe the proportion of households that owned an appliance, rather than its “usage,” and use verbs such as “rose,” “reached,” or “remained stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and a contrastive structure, for example, “Whereas, Washing machine is used less … as compared to other appliances.” However, the range is limited, and errors recur in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and tense. Examples include “in a households,” “in 1920 to 2019,” and “a rapid increased can be seen”; these make the phrasing awkward and sometimes obscure the intended relationship. The final clause, “Later in 2019, th”, is incomplete. Use past-tense forms consistently when describing the period, check singular and plural agreement, and build complete sentences. A few accurate complex comparisons would help demonstrate greater control.

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