Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the changes in ownership of electrical and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall it is clear that, the first highest percentage of people using electrical appliances of vacuum cleaner and followed by refrigerator also equal to the people expending. The lowest percentage of people washing machine users. While,arround the 99 years people following hours per week, starting period highest amount of people more houring spending but after years decline hours of housework per week.

Looking at the details, most of the people using electrical appliances vacuum cleaner begun year 30% of household expend and after the years continusly increased 100%. Followed by refrigerator users starting period people can't useing fridge and in [redacted phone]% of people useing this device.The lowest percentage of people using washing machine 40% to 70% increase after that again decline 62% to 72% increased.

Turing to the final point, number of hours per week spent on people between 1920 to 2019.In 1920 50 hours per week spent on housework washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning works.While,in 1940 significant fell in the working hours 32% and continusly coming years decline for nuber of working hours per week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad pattern that appliance ownership generally rose while weekly housework hours fell, and you include several relevant figures, such as vacuum-cleaner ownership rising from 30% to 100% and housework beginning at 50 hours. However, the overview is unclear and contains inaccurate comparisons: the washing machine was not the lowest appliance category overall, since refrigerator ownership began at about 2%. The refrigerator reached 100% by 1980, not just by 2019, and the washing-machine figures are described confusingly as rising from 40% to 70%, falling to 62%, then rising to 72%. The final paragraph gives little detail about the later decline in housework. A clearer overview and more accurate, selective comparisons would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, appliance details, and a final paragraph about housework. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “Looking at the details” and “Turing to the final point” signal a change of focus. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and the overview combines unclear comparisons with the housework trend. Linking words are sometimes mechanical or incorrectly used, as in “Followed by refrigerator users” and “While,arround the 99 years.” The final paragraph also ends without a clear summary of the later figures. Group the appliance trends together, then describe the hours trend in a complete paragraph, using clear links between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “ownership,” “percentage,” “decline,” and “hours per week,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and many word choices or forms are inaccurate enough to strain understanding. Examples include “people expending,” “people following hours,” “more houring spending,” and “working hours” where the chart reports time spent on housework. There are also spelling errors such as “continusly,” “arround,” and “nuber.” Use precise terms such as “households,” “ownership,” and “hours spent on housework,” and check spelling and collocations. Avoid describing household ownership as the number of “people” using an appliance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response follows a basic past-to-present time frame. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, which makes relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “Overall it is clear that, the first highest percentage…” has an unclear clause structure, while “In 1920 50 hours per week spent on housework” lacks a grammatical subject and auxiliary. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the lowest percentage of people washing machine users.” Punctuation frequently joins clauses without appropriate spacing or sentence boundaries. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, for example, “Households spent 50 hours per week on housework in 1920,” and use accurate comparative clauses to describe changes.

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